David Johnston wrote:

Kinai wrote:

Disclaimers:

- Ranma belongs to Rumiko Takahashi.

- Gantz belongs to Oku Hiroya Works

- This story is made for fun and is meant for the enjoyment of the fans.

- No-prereader version. Sorry.

English as a second language, eh?  Well, not bad considering.
But I have a few suggested rewrites.

- Please R&R.

***

Have you ever thought that it should happen when you die? Probably you
belong to those who believe that a hooded skeleton will come with a
scythe, to taking you to the other life. Personally I would prefer meeting
a girl dressed in a pretty kimono and sat on a broom.

What I never imagined is that I was going to appear in a typical room of
apartment.

--------------------- GANTZ �: Chapter 1: The Room.

When I opened the eyes again the first thing that I could see was the
tower of Tokyo across a crystal door.

Tokyo Tower through a crystal door

The surprise did that I got up so sharply that I felt lightly sick.

The surprise made me I get up so sharply that I felt dizzy.

Sorry, that should be "The surprise made me get up so..."


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