And moving on:
"I hope I can make it up to you eventually. Can you forgive me?"
Without a second thought, Skuld leapt into Belldandy's arms. The younger
sibling could never be happier, "I could never be angry at you, Sister!"
Not for long, anyway.
Belldandy sighed to relieve herself of all the tension. It was killing
her
inside and it showed, up until the resolution. "Maybe tonight I'll fix up
some dessert to celebrate, alright?"
Skuld nodded, "Mm-hmm!"
"Good. I have to go, I
think it should be a period instead of a comma
The contingent from the Nekomi Motor Club was in full force. Everyone had
a
role at the competition site. Some were making final tune-ups to the
vehicle. Others were among the spectators, promoting the club. Even
those
in the cheering section from the stands were important. Today was race
day,
and the club was always at its best when it was racing.
Heh. True. And thanks to Keiichi and Bell, I don't think they've lost one
since.
When she turned her head, though, Keiichi's smile brought her back down to
reality. Belldandy had never needed anything from him before. Now, it
was
all she needed, and what she needed most of all. She was ready.
The lights before them flashed, one by one, until green was shown, and the
inseparable pair took off.
---
>From a distance, the Assistant watched Belldandy speed away with Keiichi
on
the race vehicle heading into the course. All the sensations of the
moment
were mentally discarded; she didn't care much for the race at all,
can drop 'at all'.
and the
fact that Belldandy cared about it a great deal puzzled her
that sounds awkward as well. I'd reword it.
.. She was the
best among all the other goddesses, and her accomplishments as Goddess
First
Class would have been boundless, and yet she chose to live her life with a
human, the most ordinary one could ever meet, to her mind.
that sounds awkward too. Rambles a bit. Might want to separate them into two
sentences and reword it.
Keiichi, on the other hand, heard nothing that Belldandy had said. With
very little sleep in the past two days, he was exhausted and his parts
were
sore, and he was jumping up and down as a child would.
"We did it! We did it!" he said.
Heh
"So what do you think?" he asked.
Replied Belldandy, "I think we're going to win."
Keiichi laughed. "Well, yeah, of course. But I meant--" he said.
She looked up at him as he trailed off in mid-sentence. "What is it?"
"I mean...it's just that, after this, you'll go back, right?"
Hmm. Keiichi hasn't been paying attention.
"Because if it's the Assistant, I can tell you that I won't change for
her!
I mean it, Keiichi, I won't be bullied by that creature, I don't care who
she dares to speak for!"
Yeah, who cares about the Voice of God anyway. :)
"Yes," Belldandy said, placing a hand on his cheek, "Someday I'll make it
up
to you, for helping me to learn about humanity, putting up with me for all
this time."
Heh.
"C'mon, where's that annoying, irresponsible big sister I used to know and
love?" she nagged.
"Annoying?" Urd thought to herself.
How quickly she forgets the magic duels she and Bell had early in the
series. :)
"Urd," Belldandy said, "You don't have to take care of me. You don't have
to feel guilty or feel that it's your fault if I do anything wrong.
You're
my sister, and if I ever need help I know where to turn. But don't
protect
me."
But older sisters do that too. :)
"You don't understand," he insisted, putting the helmet into her hands
in a
rush, "I don't know how it happened, but they've beaten the time on our
first run!"
Heh. Sometimes it happens. There's a bigger dog out ther.
TO BE CONTINUED.
---
I don't like the pace of the story at the moment, because this ensures a
twelfth chapter plus epilogue when ten were in the works. But there's
nothing I could do about it, and it's no big deal. This story _will_ end
on
my terms. ^_^
The bad news is, with school coming up and a campaign to occupy most of my
remaining free time, what little chance and time I had to write during
this
summer will almost certainly shrink to nothing from September to November.
That is if I don't write another chapter in the next three weeks, so you
never know. If nothing, let's say I am projecting for Only Human to end
by,
oh, February or March of '04.
In any case, please lend your comments to this one. I would like to write
endlessly and for no other reward but creative feedback, but I don't have
that kind of time or willpower, so I'm hoping for some reaction of some
sort
on this piece, alright? :)
Thanks!
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