--- R E <ranma_e@hotmail.com> からのメッセージ：

Hi all,

Here's the latest chapter of Ten.  I've marked it as
lime for a scene late 
in the chapter.  It's a fairly mild scene and I
debated whether or not to 
give it the lime tag, but decided it was better to
err on the side of 
caution.

I duno if that was quite a lime... but in ways it did
hint.


Mostly general comments. 

The scene with Akane and Ryouga was great.  One question
though... Akane should be able to stop the
tranquilizers... they likely contain water and her blood
obviously contains water...  

One thing you left a bit too open is WHY Ryouga is going
to help Akane (it seems kinda obvious to me).  Not just
because she healed him... not just because she is another
dragon... but with everything he and Yoiko have gathered
and the extra questions they have... they obviously know
something is really fishy here to say the least.  But why
help Akane?  Going forward with the Wing would be a chance
to see and talk to her often to get answers.   Why does
henot have any intention of going forwarded with it?  So
that he can at least delay if not foil their plans?

Ranma and Ukyo... why does Ryukyu want Ukyo?  We know why
Ranma "wants" her... what was that sequence... Ryukyu
retaking her... retainer? protector?  Was that what had
happened... Ukyo the betrayer was orginally Ryukyu's?  

Here's a problem... Kayoko happened too long ago for them
to have good data on what happened.  So why do Hammer and
Anvil know so much?  That was not a time of technology...
particularly in Japan.  And even if Phoenix had records
from then (by Ranma's description of them you'd think
not)... they speak almost as if they had been there.

How could you end the chapter there... you created more
questions and answered just about none that came before...
 it doesn't feel like anything happened this chapter...

All in all... I am still extremely hooked, but the lack of
answers is... not good.  At one point you did answer a few
with the Happosai, Akane, Ranma sequence and a chapter or
two ago a little light was shed on Phoenix, but again only
more questions.  Granted a hook is needed to keep readers
interested and reading, but... I sometimes feel that I
read a technically good chapter, but it wasn't satisfying
in that I only have more questions and few answers...

J



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