Apologies in advance for some lingual mangling toward the end of this.

I'm

trilingual, not tetralingual, unfortunately.

Some of us are less.

Some of us aren't even unilingual. Which tends to cause much pain when they
attempt to write. XD

Minako looked very serious suddenly. "I had to transform during the
date--and he recognised me as Venus. So whatever you do, try not to have

to

transform. He can tell it's you if you do."

Riiight... one moment, here.

Okay. Now I've read the chapters I was missing.

That usually helps, yah. ^_^

I still say she looks a lot like Ukyou.

Yeah, you're right, aside from the different eye colour, different hair
colour, different hairstyle, different bra size, difference in attire,
different speech patterns and mannerisms...

*mumble mumble mumble*

I smell a confession. Hold on while I get my tape recorder...

"Looks good, Mako-chan." Ranma seated himself on one of the cushions.

Makoto

smiled and sat down across him, then began serving the meal.

across him -- across from him

*wince* Good catch.

(I don't think they've gotten to THAT point yet. ;)

Yeah, Mako-chan isn't nearly as forward as some of the girls Ranma will
meet...

Ranma folded a bit of omelette and ham onto a biscuit, and took a large
bite. Makoto took the opportunity to refill both their plates; once

Ranma

had finished his sandwich, she asked, "So what do you like to do when

you're

not eating or practising the Art?"

practising -- practicing

Errr, no. I've given up the bastardisation of the language. :P "Practice" is
a noun. "Practise" is a verb.

The pigtailed boy shrugged. "Well, I've been spendin' more time watchin'

TV

an' stuff lately. An' readin' some manga--I never really spent much time

on

all that before, not near as much as some people do." He sipped his tea.
"How 'bout you?"

Caravan Kidd manga, by chance? ;)

Nah, Ranma reads Magical Milky Princess Buttfuck-chan.

"Well, obviously I like to cook," Makoto said, grinning. "I like plants,
too. TV and manga too, I guess. Hanging out with my friends..." She

trailed

off.

Repetition of 'too'.

Dialogue. :P

The tall girl smirked. "Yosh'...you'd better be ready for a meal that'll
knock you off your feet, Saotome!"

Yosh' -- Yosh

Wrong. There's a contracted semisilent vowel there, hence the apostrophe.
Yoshi, abbreviated to Yosh'.

At that moment, the pair of them were divebombed by a duck wearing
glasses--and carrying, in its bill, a fluffy lavender cat.

Ah, yes. Domestic Tranquility, meet the Wrecking Crew.

Saotome Ranma: Billionaire Playboy, or Weird Shit Magnet? ...BOTH! XD

"Sorry, not ready yet." Cologne leaped forward and struck rapidly at

Ranma

with her staff; Ranma parried all her strikes with the Amaguriken, but

was

unable to counter, and had to fall back to a defensive stance.

It occurs to me that Cologne can only invite disaster upon herself, all

things considered.

I wonder why she would be part of this, come to think of it.

Because it beats sitting around stirring pots of ramen all day?

The other girl retreated a half-step. "You sleep good tonight, ri ben

biao

zi. Tomorrow, you is dead. Bie liao."

And before Makoto could respond, Shampoo was gone.

Hmm. The plot thickens.

Actually, it's a rather thin plot, but thanks for the vote of confidence. :P

Interesting! I'm looking forward to seeing more of this, of course.

And it's interesting that you've reincluded some of the original cast

aside from

Yeah, I figure it's good to keep a few things open for exploitation. :)

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