Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Sun, 03 Aug 2003 21:38:06 -0400 Mark MacKinnon <emmack@sympatico.ca> wrote:
"Silkaine's Siren," Kendra muttered, reading the
information that {unspooled : scrolled} across the air above the table. "An
artifact?"
"Well," Gar told her, crossing his arms across his broad
chest. "It so happens that I received an anonymous tip. It is worth
noting, however," he went on as her expression darkened, "that the
salamander became deceased courtesy of a certain group of sailor-
suited warriors."
Hmmm. Does he know not all were wearing sailor-suits at the time?
"I am afraid not, {cousin : Cousin}," Gar shrugged. "I can assure you,
though, that the artifact has been secured and is on its way here
even now, in the care of my operatives. Perhaps we will be able to
learn something from it."
"Ah, {cousin : Cousin}," Gar said, leaning against the edge of the table.
"Such an unbecoming look for a beautiful woman."
And she'll have to admit that you did something she couldn't,
I thought. That might be unfair, but it seemed to me like Usagi felt
she had something to prove to this Hotaru.
They're already ahead on points since Mercury was able to locate the
Genosphere when Saturn thought it was impossible.
So. Yoshi was to bear the brunt of Gareth's anger over this
latest frustration. Jupiter was going to be {very :} unhappy with Rin
when she found out. Very unhappy.
I think is works better if the very is added for emphasis when unhappy
is repeated.
"Lovely," the voice sighed. "And my key, {sweetness : Sweetness}. Are
you the one?" Those eyes sought out Ranma, who paled under their
regard. "I have sought you for so very long, and now you wish to
deliver yourself to me. But have no fear, pet. We shall meet soon.
Very soon."
Mamoru wiped a slick of sweat from his forehead with the
back of his hand, waiting for Yu to come over to him. The sight in
the {ward room : break room : wardroom} was sobering; white zippered bags lay in neat,
precise rows on the floor, replacing the chairs which had been
moved against the walls.
"There were suits, too," Yu went on, ignoring Mamoru's
sarcasm. "Commander Fuyutsi, for one. Blessiruth was there, too.
I think they were removing something from, as our friends in the
media will doubtless say, 'the bowels of the main tower'."
The commander of the vampire taskforce was named Fuyuri in part 13.
I'm not sure if the same commander would be sheparding this, but I
would expect him to; under one of his other hats if not the vampire
taskforce one.
They found him standing in a small knot of people, along
with Commander Amagi and {Megan : Meaghan} Piakesti, staring at a
television in the {ward room : break room : wardroom}.
"And that you're allied with the senshi," Usagi declared
morosely. "Boy, this didn't turn out the way I wanted. Instead of
going to Hotaru with information on the vampire, we have to tell her
that we're being hunted by the Sisterhood AND a vampire!"
They do have a lot more information on the vampire than they had
before. It is not very comforting to know how powerful Wynneth is,
but it's better than the ignorance they were in before.
It could be worse, they might ask Hotaru for help freeing Dasma. Her
response should be... interesting.
"Indeed, my Black Rose," Saekianna said with a predatory
smile. "I believe we have finally had a bit of good luck."
She may need to be more careful of her definition of good luck. Yoshi
is, at most, a sideshow as far as the Sisterhood's current problems
are concerned. Dealing with him should be deferred until after Dasma
is freed or the attempt has failed. Even using him to catch Jupiter
would be an unexpected bonus since they think he just happened upon
the attempt to snatch Makoto.
"You made it easy for me to find you, {pup : Pup}," Rin said
smoothly.
"I'm not one for hiding, {puss : Puss}," Yoshi replied, pushing off the
fender of his Griffon with his hips. Yoshi knew that Rin's people had
eyes around town, and he had been sure to drive by several places he
knew {: where} his presence would be noted. After what had happened on that
rooftop, Yoshi knew that blood was going to be shed. It was
inevitable. Which was fine by him; Yoshi had never been one for
avoiding conflict.
"Relax?" I grumbled. "So far today monsters overran a police
station, I got sent into the Nekoken, our plan to trap the vampire
failed, and now the girls have gone into a cemetery to talk to this
Hotaru, who apparently would gladly chop me into bits if she knew
that I was the Outsider. Not feeling the urge to relax here."
Yep, it's clear he's overreacting.
"What attention?" she asked, folding her black bat-wings up
neatly. "Nobody's out on the street around here. That little monster
freak-out this morning's got everyone spooked. And this close to a
{big-as : big-ass} old graveyard like that," she added, pointing off to my right
where a high stone wall ran for blocks in either direction, "gawkers
are going to be a rare breed on a day like today. So take it easy."
So it was, standing ajar down at the end of a short{: ,} cramped
hallway.
In fact, it seemed to me I could hear voices as I stood there, angry
voices. I moved closer, and it quickly became clear that somewhere
not too far away an argument was getting out of hand.
They moved through the grounds in silence, none of them
looking forward to the coming meeting. Venus knew that their
princess had hoped to bring something tangible to this meeting, some
valuable information from their interrogation of the captive wraith.
Now they had nothing. No, worse than nothing; the vampiress was
aware of their interest, and of the identity of the bearer of the key.
They're going to have to let Hotaru know about the Outsider or her
help will be incomplete and misguided. The trick is to do it in a way
that doesn't trigger an overreaction.
She knew the shifter's reflexes would be excellent; prepared
for her attack, he would be a formidable foe. Unfortunately for him,
she was not the threat he needed to worry about. Vi had used the
distraction provided by her Nightmistress {toto : to} move into position, and
her ribbons snaked out and wrapped the startled shifter in coils strong
as steel before he knew that she was behind him. Vi slowly began to
reel the enraged shifter in, magicked silk tightening around his throat
and arms, and Saekianna let a pitiless smile creep to her lips as the
man's face began to turn red.
I don't think they are in Kansas or even Manitoba.
As the wolf struggled fruitlessly to free himself from Banri's coils,
Saekianna flung her rose straight at Vi's captive. With the boy as bait,
she could flush out the senshi before Baniesti arrived. She could
finally guarantee the success of the revival. She ...
Saekianna does seem rather given to wish fulfulment fantacies.
"My thanks, stranger," the wolf gasped, his gray eyes pinning
Saekianna with predatory fury.
"Not so much a stranger, actually," the boy began.
Just thinking that Saekianna has a rather different impression of
Ranma's girl form. She's not Ryouga though, so I wouldn't expect an
inadvertant deception to last very long.
"Lily," Jupiter said softly. Mars blinked. Jupiter's eyes
seemed glazed, unfocussed, as they went from Yoshi's fallen form to
Saekianna.
No. Not Saekianna. She was looking behind her, at ...
"LILY!"
Then the world exploded in light.
That's even better than "shoot the hostage", the perfect irrational
act to break the deadlock.
"Gone," Rin said, watching Jupiter carefully. "All of them, gone.
Courtesy of your rage and that magicked whip, it appears. I must
confess, I would dearly love to know what that woman did to have
enraged you so."
Yes. Take notes and be very, very careful not to do the same.
"Hey," she said softly. "Jupiter? {I : We} need you here right now.
{We : I} need you."
I think that order would be more a powerful statement and maybe more
consistant with Moon's thought process.
"I can't locate them," Mercury told her, shaking her head as she
swept her visor from side to side. "I have a theory, though. Based on
my scans, it seems that {Banri : the whip} summoned some sort of Shadow Magick
in response to Jupiter's attack. Rin, Neptune, Jupiter and Saturn could
have been thrown through Shadow, emerging at points nearby."
Mercury knows that that whip is not Banri.
"Sweetie, I'm not in a very good mood," V informed the girl.
"So get your {as : ass} up before I write my name on it in gold fire. 'Kay?"
"I don't have to hear the plan to know that it's going to be
dangerous. Like this morning in the warehouse dangerous, perhaps.
Mars, what if something goes wrong? We're a long way from home,
babe."
But that was a beauty plan. It just worked a littel too well. :}b
"I still don't see how that will help us locate the others,"
Pluto said as Mars prepared herself. "Or what it has to do with
Mercury. Surely you aren't going to tell me that she's a Shadow
Adept, too?"
It's actually surprising how many secrets the Inners kept under
Hotaru's roof. I would have expected Hotaru to have investigated her
recruits a bit more carefully.
Some of the tension seemed to leach out of Michiru's face
then, and Ami marvelled at how Usagi often knew just what to say.
Still, she wasn't at all certain that they could reach the others, at least
not if they really were in Shadow. Usagi seemed to think that Ami's
power would be of some use, but that was because she just didn't
understand. An {aethyr : Aether} port was useful for one thing only: getting
into Aethyr. Other realms were beyond Ami's reach.
Dammit, Saotome, are you sitting here rhapsodising about the
freaking colour of a girl's HAIR? Get your {as : ass} in gear!
"Come on, Yurina," Mars said with a humourless laugh. "I
remember all of them, every single one. And so do you."
This makes it sound like Rei was involved in that mission, but she
didn't appear to know Makoto's story in part 9 though she did know
that Makoto had been in the Black Dragons. Or does Rei mean she
remembers every mission?
"Desire is a cruel mistress," Yurina said serenely. "I have
accepted the risks that come with my life. It is simply ironic that in
this case, I sought only selfish pleasure and instead did damage far
beyond what I could have imagined."
It actually sounds like seducing Makoto is one of the least selfish
things she'd ever done. That's what makes all the damage it did so
ironic.