Okay, reading this again ^-^


*hits enter a few times to help prevent spoilage unto others*





*hits it a few more times for good measure*

"You no have tell Shampoo twice!" The Chinese girl threw a still dazed
Kuno over her left shoulder. "Come on, stupid stick-boy. Shampoo save
you for some reason."

- I love this quote, though I'm not exactly sure why.

"Worry about it later." Ryouga's voice became steady, again, and more
than a little cold. "Ranma's coming... He thinks he's won. But ... This
isn't over yet. I'm not finished... yet."

- *douses Ryoga with cold water* Ha! ....gomen. ^-^ That would probably be a
far too easy solution at this point, anyway.

Luckily, the
Principal seemed both able and happy to repair damage to the school, as
well as renovate it at a whim.

-Happy? I'd see him sneaking off into the night with shears to relieve Ryoga
and Ranma of their hair, among other things, but okay ^-^

"It's been a week." Hibiki Ryouga poked his bandaged left hand
experimentally. "Still hurts."

- I imagine Ranma would be saying the same thing about the slap from Ukyo.
Very nice, btw.

Blinking, Saotome Ranma tried to come up with something to say before
she was gone and failed. Silenced, for one of the few times in his life,
he stood there. Stunned. Finally, he touched his cheek gently and
smiled.

Home.

- Aww. Actually, I think this is very appropriate. Well-timed and subtle.

Part 13

"Watch Hiroshi!" Ryouga yelled, and hopped someone was on Ranma's
classmate.

- I believe you mean "hoped".

"It's very awkward for me... Especially when she has that little pig
with her. I don't like pigs, Ranma. I didn't like them before, and I
don't like them now. Akane I just... we just don't have a lot in common.
I know it sounds stupid, but... the only reason I liked her, back then,
was because I was P-chan and because she was nice to me... him... like
that."

- I like this conversation, but the sentence starting with "Akane I just"
seems off. Maybe it needs a comma, or some dots earlier? Or "As for
Akane...I just..." or something like that.

- Anyway, good parts, both of these. I loved the conversation Ryoga and
Ranma had in the bath, and Mousse's memories of playing The Amazons and the
Musk.


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