--- Zorknot <zorukonotsu@yahoo.com> wrote:
I haven't had anyone look at this yet. Please let me know of any problems.
Hope you enjoy,
the fic should follow
Other than your habitual failure to make use of quotation marks, either single or double, it looks okay. But then, maybe in the face of that, I simply didn't notice other problems.
Quotation marks should be used to set off speech--the direct words of characters. Apostrophes must be used in all contractions to indicate where letters have been ommitted. Apostrophes are also used to indicate possession.
This fic does not contain either character, anywhere. On a standard keyboard, both are to be found on the center row, to the far right, immediately left of the return key. (Use with shift for a quotation mark, without for an apostrophe.)
Perhaps this is a cross-platform issue, and the characters, while present in the file as viewed on your machine, simply do not appear on my system. If this is the case, you need to make certain you are using standard ASCII characters, rather than "smartquotes" or other such nonsense. However, normally such problems result in funny looking characters in those positions, not none at all, as I found, so I doubt this to be the case.
The story itself is quite good, so failure to distinguish speech from narrative is particularly frustrating. It makes the text more difficult to read, and I /want/ to read this story. Most things that arrive in my inbox like this would be deleted largely unread.
Defender of the Light
Elite Mage
junior member of the Inner Circle of the Mages Council
Contrary to popular opinion, magic and science do mix.
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