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----- Original Message ----- 
From: "J. B-Wagner" <jbw@wpi.edu>
To: <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Saturday, July 19, 2003 7:57 PM
Subject: [FFML] [INFO][R1/2 Fanfiction] "Learning Curve"

Well... Ok. 'Some news of some note.'

First, I'd like to express my thanks to all those who extended to me
their comments and criticism. With it, I hope to make my writing more
appealing to as willing an audience as possible, as well as improve my
overall writing style. I have just recently finished the update of the
first fifteen chapters in response to this input. Many of the changes
were minor - grammatical errors corrected, spelling mistakes, other
little problems (a couple miss-spelled okonomiyaki's, the infamous
'prima donna' mistake, etc).

Okay, no problems with 9 and 10, mostly fighting anyway :-) Quite good so
far...though maybe you went into almost too much detail with the fight. But
it happens.

In part 10, you did the smelt instead of smelled thing again. Just do a
search on page for it, it might be something you've done a handful of imes.

"Look at us, damnit! Look at what we are! What this... what you're

hatred made us! FOR WHAT!?"

-Should be a your, there...Ranma read my mind, with this sudden conversation
:-) I always feel so bad for him in the anime and manga...he gets crapped
upon almost as much as Ryoga does.

I particularly liked the scene near the end there where Ryoga is protecting
Nabiki and they go through the memories.

-Denise


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