Getting back to the backlog after a lengthy break....

"Denise Cameron" <elenaholman@opgaming.com> wrote:

"Hurry up Ranma, get up!" Akane yelled, towering over Ranma's still

"Hurry up, Ranma, get up!"

She had just gotten up about five minutes ago herself, and was still
in her sleeping clothes; a pair of yellow, flannel pants and an old
yellow tshirt with frilly sleeves. Although she wanted to continue on

t-shirt

with her morning routine, the fact that she hadn't heard Ranma made
her wonder if he was even up yet. _Well Ranma, looks like I have to

_Well, Ranma,

"Hey! What do ya think you're doing?" she asked in a whinny voice.

whiny

RANMA: Well, I *am* a "wild horse."

"I didn't want to use it, but you grabbed my leg. It wasn't my fault!"
Akane defended. So much for sparing him today, she thought, feeling

sparring with him

"Oh, and I suppose you get one first?" called Akane, running after her
for a few steps.

GENMA: You could save time by taking one together, you know.

RANMA: Don't push it, Pop.

"We weren't working that late, we just did homework for a while. Don't
go getting us in trouble by telling Auntie Saotome we were studying
when we promised her we'd relax," her father merely grunted, and

relax." Her
(May want to make the last descriptive sentence a separate paragraph,
since Akane has the dialog and it's Soun's action.)

"Of course I did, I'm not a pig like you," she replied, running up the
stairs, then turning around after a few steps, "Oh, your mom made us

steps. "Oh,

boxed lunches today, don't forget them. I'll be down soon." She said.

soon," she

"I thought you talked to her?" asked Akane, assuming he was trying to
avoid her usual over-affectionate attitude towards him. He did look

"her" referring to Ukyo? Not clear.

"They...they...they teamed together, and knocked him down without
breaking stride! As though they read each others minds...," said Ukyo
sadly, taking a step towards the still down Kuno. Even the foot prints

footprints

Just seeing them do such a small thing together, like a real couple,
was enough to tear her apart.

Too bad for her she wasn't around to see the similar scene way back in
volume 1, story 6 (of the original series).

Not much to say here, as it was a pretty short and probably transitional
section. I look forward to reading the next one.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.garykleppe.org/comics.html

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