Going a few spaces down so I don't spoil anything.







Okay, I've read part 8.



I have actually started a new job that keeps me even busier, so don't worry
if you see larger gaps in between my comments. I am still reading, just at a
slower rate :-)

I loved part 8, but I was confused about one thing. Okay, Shampoo picks up
the little black piglet who we take to be Ryoga, because you write out
Ryoga's opinions/feelings on things as he's being picked up. But later, as
Shampoo's talking to him, he acts more like a real pig, and then he doesn't
change with water (maybe he just needs to be taken in to be repaired? How
long does his warranty with Jusenkyo last, anyway? Joke, joke). Was this
originally one way, then you changed it and didn't edit correctly, or did I
just misinterpret some things?

Giving Shampoo that choice was a good move, you did it sublty enough that I
didn't see it coming.

Well, that's all from me for now, I'll read more sometime, and you'll hear
about it. ^-^

- Denise



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