Denise Cameron <denisecameron@eastlink.ca> wrote:

"It seems to be our only lead," Tofu agreed, his voice cracking
slightly. Akane knew how the he felt about Kasumi; he was obviously

- Looks like you started to say "the doctor", or something, and put in "he",
then forgot to take out "the".

Oops, will fix.

She fell alongside Ranma as they walked away from the abandoned
village back toward the river, feeling a large emptiness settle at the

- Fell in (or fell-in, however it's written). Otherwise you'd have
Ranma and Akane horizontal, though I'm sure *they* wouldn't mind
that too much...^-^

AKANE: Well, there *is* a time and a place for it....

(I'd thought "in" would be implied, but I'll put it in explicitly.)

The long-haired prisoner screamed something as his naked body

- They didn't give Mousse any clothes at all? o_o That's really harsh.

Nope, not a scrap. Zhen Biaozi isn't taking any chances with his hidden
weapons.

I would have thought maybe some old rags at least to keep him from
freezing to death (or severe sickness).

Well, that's not too likely, given that it's a hot time of year, in the
desert, and Mousse has a fairly strong constitution. Besides, he can
always transform and be covered with feathers.

She stepped to the foot of the stairs. The hair was white, the skin
covered in wrinkes, just as before. She pushed her fingers into the
body's wrists, and then its chest, checking for a pulse. There was none.
She had wondered whether Ms. Kuonji would survive the transformation,
after Shan Pu had, but it seemed that the okomiyaki chef was not so
fortunate.

- So...Ukyo's dead now? ;_; Nah, I don't think she is. I'm confused though.

We can make no comment at this time. Not until we get our tongue back.
:-) Anyway, it'll all be revealed in the next chapter, unlike Mousse,
whose all has already been revealed. :-)

Good job. I knew Kodachi was still alive because, for some reason, I
scrolled
down to read the comments from the Eternal Lost Lurker before reading. My
own fault entirely.

Thanks very much for the comments!


Gary Kleppe
http://www.garykleppe.org/comics.html

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