I agree with SKJM. This is barely an introduction, and one that fails to
grip me in the slightest. You've told us that everything is different, but
we have no idea from what. Is this an original series, or does it come from
one or more anime series? I recommend writing more and making this snippet
the introduction or somesuch.

DB Sommer



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