Ok, first off this will be a spoiler C&C about CCS Anime and Manga.. That
said, Props to you Lurker-san on a fic well writen, You've gotten me quite
hooked and jonsing for the next chapter.. Ok, now on to the more critical
side of my letter, Don't worry, there will be good things in here too
<Giggle>... Ok, first off, If you're trying to make this an Alternate
Universe fanfiction, You're doing a good job and really when you go AU, you
really can't complaign.. But you make several notes you're trying to keep as
cannon as possible or so it seems if not, put an AU in the title, just for
us purists <wink>, so lemme offer some information/tips that I would use on
the CCS side.

A) In manga 11 and 12 (Master of the Clow 5 and 6 in america) it is revealed
that Fujitaka is the other half of Clow Reed. Yes, thats right, Sakura is
the daughter of Clow Reed, Which was no surprise to me it made since in some
ways, Perhaps you could have included that maybe Dumbledore knew of this,
and is also why he aluded that Sakura was 'practically' his heir, because
she WAS his heir, and this could be revealed in later chapters, While its
hinted that Nadeshiko had magical powers of some kind, I don't think they'd
be enough to outweigh the fact she's Clow Reed's daughter.. However that
prevents Malfoy from calling Sakura an Mudblood! <GRIN> I honestly can see
Dumbledore however using that excuse since this is happening supposedly
between the time after the Saigo Shinpan (Last Judgemt sounds corny) and the
Sakura Card arc, Fujitaka doesn't know his former self and Dumbledore
probably would rather keep it that way than make Fujitaka himself worry
about Voldie-chan coming after HIM next but Dumbledore reveals it to Harry
or Sakura MUCH later on.

B) I think Touya and Yukito should have gotten to go, Honestly.. But thats
just me... Since its supposed to be post Saigo Shinpan, then its clear that
Yukito is Yue so, Unless again this is a alternate universe, I think they
both should somehow appear.. But thats just me.. I think Touya would look
hot in the Hogwarts outfit myself, Ravenclaw all the way buddy, Probably
give Cho a reason to actually LEAVE the dorms with those two around I'd love
to see Prof. McGongal's face when she has to deal with the Student's
reaction to a yaoi relationship! Not like there isn't a boatload of Yaoi/Gay
HP Fanfiction out there already but...

C) You send Sakura to england yet you have no plans for Eriol or Kaho? If
you remember Kaho went to england to study abroad (Who's to say she's not a
teacher at Hogwarts?) and Eriol met her in England, thus why Kaho and Touya
broke up (Talk about leaving you for your own dad.. That HAD tu hurt..) And
yea, that makes Eriol effectivly Sakura's father too... My two dads for real
huh? I think that Eriol should be perhaps masquerading as a student, but
perhaps working with Dumbledore to help Sakura learn the ways of J.K.
Rowling's style magic but to also change the Clow cards into Sakura cards...
It would be harder for Voldie-chan to get his hands on the SAKURA cards when
they have a mistress, than the Clow cards who's master is quite literally
beside himself..

D) While I agree that Sakura needed a new wand, I'd hate to think that the
Moon guardian didn't contribute a hair to Sakura's wand either.. As it
explaigns in the first series, The Sun and the Moon rool different aspects
of the Clow..If you're going on her powers as the mistress of the Clow..Yue
should be involved as much as Kerberos.. And if the Saigo Shinpan has
happened, She would have the Star Wand anyway not the sealing wand.. And if
she still has the sealing wand, she wouldn't have all the Clow Cards.. But
again in an AU, Logic doesn't really have to make since, Heck you could
probably have tossed the whole bit with Yue for all we care, but if you're
claming cannon-ness, you need to do some research.

As I said, its a great fanfiction and I'll read it reguardless if you make
these changes SOMEHOW or not.. Its already got me hooked, but if it is
TRUELY an alternate universe, you should state it.. But for an AU CCS /
Harry Potter crossover fic, It ROCKS MY SOX! But for a Cannon CCS / Harry
Potter crossover fic, its been weighed, judged, and found lacking but it can
improve and be made cannon EASILY and I will be more than happy to discuss
my ideas with you should you so desire in private e-mail.


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