On Wednesday, Jun 4, 2003, at 17:30 US/Central, David Johnston wrote:

Uhn.  As an opening it fails to grab me.  Where's the conflict?
Presumably it should develop in the next chapter...at least one hopes
so, but to grab the reader at the very start you should probably give a
sample of the badness.  As it stands, this reads like one of those
pointless crossovers where nothing happens.

Well, um, there won't be a next chapter. At least, not from me. True, I 
quit right when the going gets interesting, but that was mostly because 
I wanted to write a bit with Usagi being puzzled by everything. 'Twas 
fun, y'know. It's not the sort of thing I'd usually post to the FFML, 
but I figured, what the hey.


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