Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Sun, 25 May 2003 03:48:28 -0400 Sean Danna <carrotglace@mindspring.com> wrote:
She sat with her friends. Makoto and Minako were on either side of her.
Their hands were clasped, Minako was sleeping, and Jupiter was looking
away pensively while shaking her foot continuously.
Later you call Jupiter Makoto. I initially took this to mean that
Jupiter was transformed to her senshi identity and the otheres were
not.
The trio all looked up {to : at} her, even Minako. The girl's entrance had
woken her up. Rei's {Grandfather : grandfather} even took a moment to glance {back :} at
her.
"{Sorry mom : Sorry, Mom}," replied the girl. She turned away and started running down
the hallway.
The problem worked itself in her mind over and over. If only she hadn't
been chasing Spiderman around all day. She might have been able to save
her friends.
It was all his fault!
I'd been hoping Venom would consider taking common cause with Carrot
at least long enough to deal with the 'other'. Obese opportunity. I
should know better than to expect him to get an even break.
They didn't need her to come down and identify the body. Her sister had
been wearing her {nametag : name tag}, and most of her uniform was still intact.
Someone at the hospital is my guess. My main question is how she
knows there will be a body to identify.
"You saw how I showed up at your door. I still don't know what I was
thinking when I did that. I think I was worried about being late for
some reason."
Rightly so. Piss her off and he's in *real* trouble.
"No," replied the boy quietly. "I've trained with a sword before,
but...I'm not this good. I know I'm not." He looked at his hand and
frowned. These little surprises were usually in his favor, but it was
growing more and more unsettling. "What's happening to me?"
It's a nice sword... except for that teensie little curse. :}b
That was when it hit him. A lot of his problems {: had} sort of ironed
themselves out. Hisami was dead, Goblin had blown up, and the Ninja
appeared too want to leave him alone. There was still Kei, and Venom to
deal with though. He still wasn't sure about the {Yakuza : yakuza} though. If he
played his cards right, they might just forget about him.
"I've got no plans to go out looking for trouble for a few days at
least anyway."
"Looking for trouble?"
That would be superfluous.
"Huh? Some {Yakuza : yakuza} boss died, I'm hoping it was sort of a personal thing
and that the guy who takes over won't care about me. That or some sort
of internal war makes it more trouble than it's worth, and they forget
about me."
"Shit." This wasn't good news. He wasn't sure what to make of it
either. Two hundred deaths didn't sound much like the work of the
Negaverse. Then again, things hadn't exactly been going the way they
should have recently. He had no clue what they had been up {too : to}.
"The rooftops and above the streets are the most likely area to meet
him," replied the older ninja gruffly. "Start looking, if you see him
follow until you lose him or he gets where he's going, report to me if
you find him. Do not attempt to contact him yourselves. I'm not certain
how friendly he'll be. I don't think he'll attack me though. I've spoken
with him before now. You two I am not certain of."
The youths glanced at each other wordlessly and bounced off in opposite
directions.
The older shinobi sighed heavily. "Rebuilding the clan will be more
difficult than I imagined."
Too much chlorine in the gene pool?
"Turn that down! We need to be able to hear if anything or anyone
decides to land on the van!" cried Carrot into the man's ear.
Back to the age old question. Is it paranoia if they all really are
out to get you?
Carrot walked out the front door with the pair. "I might have to fight
my way out of here. You two get back into town, drive {vast : fast} and keep an
eye out for tails. These people don't want anyone to know they were
involved with any of this. I recommend that you forget about this story
Mei Lin."
Is driving vast something like living large? :}b
"Yeah. Sure," muttered Hibiki dumbly. He was still standing as he was
when the mess had started. "Whatever you say lady."
"Hurry up!" snapped the girl as she pulled at his arm and turned him
towards the van again.
They hopped into the vehicle and drove away from the mess.
Now I'm confused. Someone had a plan that actually worked.