Never haning seen this anime, my reply will probably mostly consist of writing 
critisism.

Seated directly across from them, Osaka interjected herself into the
conversation, "My parents took me to a museum that had dinosaurs once. It
was on this island that you could only get to by flying. And it was all
outdoors, so you had to drive around, and you got to see all the different
dinosaurs penned up in their natural environments. Only someone sabotaged
the main power generator, and the dinosaurs got out and started eating
everyone. It was very scary."

haha

Tomo punched Yomi in the solar plexus, instantly winding her and doubling
her over as she gasped for air.

man

"My, you're certainly eager," the woman said happily. Her poise and demeanor
shifted to a somewhat more authoritative one. "Now if you'll step this way,
we'll start with the Hall of Rocks,

hahaha

"No. I'm a teacher. I don't need to learn anything."

exactly

"Hmph, trying to foist her responsibilities on me.

unless the guide is a woman, you might want to make 'her' into 'their'

"I was just making a joke," Tomo admitted. She then elbowed Kagura in the
ribs. "Did you hear that? I got a saying right."

haha

Bewildered, Yomi said, "I somehow doubt that. You can't genetically alter
rocks, seeing as they have no genes."

again, i havent seen this anime, but am i to take they are all very young?
or did they get to the museum on the short bus?

Sakaki's attention had been so riveted to the smaller skeleton that she had
failed to notice a taller one behind it. She looked up and into the
ferocious jaws of what was obviously a dinosaur with very many, very sharp,
teeth.

the mommy dinosaur

A chorus of  "Yes" filled the air.

need punctuation after any word in quotation marks, unless you want to make 
them single quotes.

"One hundred bottles of beer on the wall.
One hundred bottles of beer.
You take one down.
Pass it around.
Ninety-nine bottles of beer on the wall.
Ninety-nine bottles of beer on the wall."

add a space before the last line, as it starts a new verse, and id add an 
elipsis too...

No, really, it is the writer's notes, not an introduction to the next scene.
A bit sillier than usual for the series, but hey, I thought it'd be good for
a few laughs, and it's not like there's a lot of Azumanga fics out there to
compete with (though I'd really like for there to be.) Typical ending with
no real point to it or deeper meaning. Just some basic silliness. Thanks for
reading, and hope you enjoyed it at least a little.

I did, makes me want to watch the series.

ae


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