"DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:
yay! I love CotS:
Heh. It seems either you love it or you hate it...
"Shhh, quiet. Do you want the whole class to know what we're talking
about?"
"Sorry. The report also said these pills are really expensive. How
should Lain get the money for such amounts of drugs?"
The end sounds awkward. i'd reword, though I can't figure out how.
How about: How does a schoolgirl get the money for such amounts of drugs?
"Well, there's rumors about some secret fetish club. You know, rich guys
who are into... well..."
"I think I understand. You're talking about these crazy guys dressed in
black, don't you?
Will Smith: I am not crazy.
K: You are.
J: Am not!
Z: You are!
A peaceful day in the Abh Empire. The view from the panoramic window
shows
argh! I do not like the use of present tense here, I do confess.
I agree but didn't want to mix different times. Maybe I should rewrite
the whole fic in past tense...
"Woah Lafiel, relax, it's just me!"
"Jinto? You really startled me."
Jinto: No! Really? I'd have never guessed from the scream.
Could've been the cat biting her. ^_^.
The princess melts into the embrace of her husband.
"Did you leave me to see your cattier sister?"
Heh
Originally I wrote catgirl but this is better. ^_^
Jinto looks at the console when his eyes go wide. Lafiel turns to him
with an evil grin on her face.
Yes. Evil grins are bad on an Abh. :)
Oh yeah. ^_^
After some analysis the princess decides to act.
Lafiel: Bring a Death Star on line.
Jinto: Wrong series.
Who cares? It's a crossover anyway. ^_^
Lafiel: Oh, right. Sorry. Burn off the atmosphere. We'll put a new one in
later.
How about methane?
"Jinto? We've waited a few hours now. Aside from that weird meowing
crystalline ship demanding our retreat nothing happened.
Heh. Cute cameo, but I'd drop it. Sides, If it's OVA Ryo-ohki, she could
conceivably take them out.
Lafiel has a whole fleet, at least there would've been massive
collateral damage. Why risk that?
Too
bad the Juraians claim this planet.
Oh, like THAT would stop the Ahb if they wanted it. ^_^
Who said something about stop? Just a delay... ^_^
Nice for a spamfic.
Thanks. ^_^
Ja
Christian "Schobronics" Schober