yay! I love CotS:

"Shhh, quiet. Do you want the whole class to know what we're talking
about?"
"Sorry. The report also said these pills are really expensive. How
should Lain get the money for such amounts of drugs?"

The end sounds awkward. i'd reword, though I can't figure out how.

"Well, there's rumors about some secret fetish club. You know, rich guys
who are into... well..."
"I think I understand. You're talking about these crazy guys dressed in
black, don't you?

Will Smith: I am not crazy.

 > A peaceful day in the Abh Empire. The view from the panoramic window

shows

argh! I do not like the use of present tense here, I do confess.

"Woah Lafiel, relax, it's just me!"
"Jinto? You really startled me."

Jinto: No! Really? I'd have never guessed from the scream.

The princess melts into the embrace of her husband.

"Did you leave me to see your cattier sister?"

Heh

Lain smiles triumphantly. With a little chemical help her

help, her

Just as two certain lovebirds have gone back to bed the com system
activates.

"Fraud�c Abl�arsec N��c Dubleuscr, we just received a message for you.
You can read it at your com console."

Reluctantly the princess leaves the warmth of the bed and moves over to
the wall where she stares at the displayed message.

"Is it something urgent?"

need a space here

"Read for yourself, you probably wouldn't believe me."

Jinto looks at the console when his eyes go wide. Lafiel turns to him
with an evil grin on her face.

Yes. Evil grins are bad on an Abh. :)

Lafiel's new ship, the Alaicec-class Nikushokudoubutsu (Predator) enters
orbit around earth. Jinto calls from his own ship, the R�sic-class
Martin.

"Lafiel, our fleet is on orbit around the planet. It seems rather
primitive, no defenses safe

save

some satellites with nuclear missiles."

The princess starts to answer when a new message arrives. A female voice
can be heard on the bridge.

"Hello Princess.

Hello, Princess

Jinto explains "It's probably a virus, a disease designed to attack
computers. Isolate and restart the infected systems and you should be
fine.".

I think someone said something about the virus explaination being
unncessary. I agree. Also an extra period

"I'm god! Why can't I get through their defenses?

Lain: Wait a minute. They're not using binary. AHHHH!

After some analysis the princess decides to act.

Lafiel: Bring a Death Star on line.

Jinto: Wrong series.

Lafiel: Oh, right. Sorry. Burn off the atmosphere. We'll put a new one in
later.

"Jinto? We've waited a few hours now. Aside from that weird meowing
crystalline ship demanding our retreat nothing happened.

Heh. Cute cameo, but I'd drop it. Sides, If it's OVA Ryo-ohki, she could
conceivably take them out.

 Not one word

from this Lain."
"It seems to be over. Well, that was fast."
"Seems so. To

Too

bad the Juraians claim this planet.

Oh, like THAT would stop the Ahb if they wanted it. ^_^

Nice for a spamfic.

DB Sommer





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