From: Aaron E Nowack <anowack@juno.com>
When six years had passed, Tokyo-4 boasted over a thousand and a
half people, in addition to perhaps a third of that number living in
smaller settlements on its outskirts. The scouts occasionally traded
A thousand and a half? I think you mean fifteen-hundred, though I suppose
that you really could have half a person...
Other than that, nothing else really stood out as worth pointing out in this
or chapter 1. I personally like using this writing style, though I'm sure I
botch it up quite a bit more than you.
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