DB Sommer wrote:

Since this got a good reaction, decided to look it over myself.

Glad you did!

Here's a bit of silliness that I've been working on since the beginning
of the year. It's a bit long for a "spamfic", I think.

Yep. Shortfic would probably be best

And if it goes to that, I just tend to not label it at all.

What Color Is Your Revolution?
by Laurie Gerholz
March 2003

      Miki Kaoru watched the snowflakes drift lazily down.  It had
just begun to snow, and the ground was slowly whitening.  He glanced
from the window to the wall clock across the atrium.  It indicated
there were still ten minutes to meeting time.

'until' instead of 'to' perhaps?

Maybe.

 A moment later

treasurer Juri Arisugawa came in, shaking the snowflakes off of

drop 'of'

Got it.

      "You're so accommodating," she said teasingly.  Miki could feel
himself blushing a bit under the older girl's fond regard.

      The outer door opened again and a tall young man stepped inside.
The door, as it swung shut, blew off some of the snow that dusted
his long wavy hair and wool coat.  Kyouichi Saionji removed his
gloves and stuck them in his coat pockets, watching Miki and Juri
with a stony regard.

Aw, give him one with earflaps, like a reject from 'Fargo' :)

Hey, I resemble that remark! Seriously, as a born and bred Minnesotan, I
can testify to the accuracy of "Fargo". ^^ And I'm not putting Saionji
in one of those hats. :-P

      "I haven't seen him for a bit," explained Saionji.  "Had other
things to do, and then the summons showed up in my mailbox."  He
glanced up at the clock and scowled.  "Just watch, now he'll be late
and make us wait on him."

wait 'for' him. Waiting on him would be something servants do.

Touga: And he's *so* good at it.

This may be a regionalism. We'll use " wait on" to imply that there's
quite a bit of imposition occuring. Of course we'll use "wait for" also,
as you suggest, and "wait on" also for the servant sense.

      But Saionji was proved

proven (I think)

Could be. Both seem correct to me. I'll have to check this. Got a
grammar reference around here somewhere...

      Touga managed to glare at him without losing an ounce of his
famed composure.  "So to avoid further wasting anyone's valuable
time, I'll ask Nanami to share her news with us."

      Nanami popped up out of her chair before Touga was even seated.
"Thank you, big brother."

Big Brother

Thank you! I've been perpetually confused about this usage.

 Nanami hastened to

add against the possibility of raising Touga's ire.  "These aren't
any big departure from all your current colors.  I've just selected
suitable shades of each for this year.  I think you'll like your new
red."  She swiftly held out the folder with Touga's name to him.
Still watching his sister carefully, Touga took the folder from her.

      Touga opened the folder and brought out a card, colored a bright
red.  He held the card next to the red trim of his sleeve.  "It's
different?"

Nanami: It's Fuschia. :)

Actually, it was more of a Vermillion. ^_~ Or maybe it was Fushion,
which was actually in one of the real CMG forecasts this year or last.

      "Oh, of course," said Utena.  "What was I thinking?"  Miki
thought Utena wasn't doing a very good a job of swallowing her smile.

      "Don't you think my color is fitting, Utena?" asked Touga.

Utena; No, it's not gay enough.

Touga; I'm bishonen, thank you. Not gay.

Utena:  Let's ask the Dean about that.

      "How ... pretty," Touga commented.  There was that rich,
seductive undertone in his voice that Touga usually reserved for
whichever girl had caught his attention for the day.  Miki felt the
heat flush in his cheeks as he sat down, and *knew* he didn't dare
look Touga's way, or say anything to the Student Council President.

Utena; See. I told you 'Passion' wasn't gay enough.

Touga: Just because I can appreciate manly beauty does not mean I'm gay.

Utena:  Let's ask the Dean, and Saionji.

      Utena stiffened.  "Hey, *I* didn't pick those fussy Dueling
clothes, they were assigned to me.  My regular uniform would've been
just fine..."  She stopped as Anthy gently touched her sleeve.

She should have gotten the movie outfit garb. :)

Someone else suggested that too, but it just seemed out of place.

<snip the color discussion>

      "What could it possibly be called?" Anthy mused, staring at the
card apprehensively as if she suspected it might start skittering
about under its own power.

      "How about 'nuked puke'?" suggested Juri.

and that's good too.

This was actually the hardest part of the whole thing to write.

      "No!  Never!" cried Saionji, slamming the table with his fists
in fury.  "I'll duel naked before I'll wear that!"

      "Ooh, I'd like to see that," chimed in Touga, eyes bright.

Utena; I told you!

Touga: It takes a man very confident in his heterosexuality to sleep with
another man. I am NOT GAY!

Akio:  Of course not. He's bi.

Touga:  ~~~...!

      "Don't worry, big brother.  You'll help me draft a letter
explaining it all to him.  He'll certainly see that we can't
*possibly* continue in last year's colors."

paragraph break.

Okay.

      "You are making absolutely no sense," said Mikage, but he took
the proffered card.  The dim violet illumination from the grow lamps
wasn't enough to read the lettering, let alone determine anything
interesting about the dark side of the card, so Mikage took it to
the desk and turned on the brighter lamp there.

      The one side of the card still appeared simply ... black, to
Mikage.  He read the other side of the card.  He frowned at Mamiya.
"What the heck kind of color is 'Asphalt'?"

Heh. Cute.

Well, I liked it. Very amusing.

Thanks for reading, and thanks for the detailed commentary.

Laurie
milo@winternet.com
http://www.winternet.com/~milo


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