Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Tue, 04 Mar 2003 21:16:52 -0800 Christopher Olsen
<christopherolsen28@hotmail.com> wrote:
Misty giggled softly. "Don't be silly, {husband : Husband}! Even if you could have
stopped, I certainly wouldn't have wanted you too! I thought I'd never get
enough... I felt insatiable." She snuggled into his side with a contented
sigh. "But you... completed me. Thank you."
Happosai winked down at her knowingly. "It took me most of eighty years to
perfect the technique, and I thought it was wasted... until I picked up this
wonderful curse." He told her cheerfully. "Some people think Jusenkyo is
evil... but I just think it likes to have a little fun. The curses can be a
real blast if you know what you're doing. They don't have to be the end of
the world." He rolled his eyes. "That moron, Ranma. He had the power to
turn into the sweetest little thing I'd ever seen, and he wastes it. He
could sneak into every hot spring, public bath, and {girl's : girls'} gym in existence,
any time he wanted to, but he never wised up. Now he's lost his "curse" and
all I can say is good riddance. He never deserved such fortune." Happosai
chortled. "Besides, that leaves sweet little Ranko-chan. No more turning
into a guy, just girl sweet girl, twenty four seven." Happosai rubbed his
hands together in anticipation. "I can't wait to get a hold of her, so I
can show her what a Jusenkyo curse is really for."
An hour later, Happosai walked {cheefully : cheerfully} from the bedroom nearest the baths,
wearing his purple gi again and nearly skipping in glee. "What a hottie!"
He chortled happily as he walked down the hall. "Two or three more like
that and even I won't want any more!" He shook his head ruefully, glancing
back at the bedroom where he had left Urd sleeping. "Sorry girl, but just
one woman will never be enough for me. I'm far too much man for just one...
even one as much fun as you were."
"Your sister's just {find : fine}, my dear." Happosai said placatingly. "She's
sleeping it off in the first bedroom past the bath, if you'd care to check
on her. She's just a bit tired, is all. I was just too much for the poor
lass, I'm afraid." He winked at Haruka knowingly. "Perhaps you'll have a
bit more pep, what do you think? You seemed to have plenty of energy
earlier...."
Happosai nodded cheerfully. "Of course!" He counted out ten chips and
handed them over, taking a {Setsuna's :} shoe in exchange.
< This isn't so bad.> Skuld thought to herself. < With everything I'm
wearing I'll be fine for the next... hundred turns... and that's if I lose
every time.> The bidding passed around the circle coming back to Happosai,
who cheerfully put out a chip of his own. Skuld blinked indignantly. "Hey,
wait a second. How come you can just take a chip from the pile while the
rest of us have to buy them from you?"
I enjoyed Skuld's analysis of how to play poker.
Not that he minded changing his focus back to her. "Here you go dear. Ten
more chips for you." Happosai stared avidly at Haruka's newly revealed
breasts despite having gotten to see them for a few moments several hours
before. It wasn't quite the same somehow, and there they were, just barely
out of reach, hanging like a pair of ripe apples waiting to be plucked...
just waiting.... Happosai wiped the drool off his chin and paid attention
to what Haruka was saying.
Having to sell clothes each time they want to bet beyond their
current chips makes it harder to bluff. Being naked from the start
would distract Happosai more and possibly reduce his enjoyment later.
Next time they play, Setsuna and Urd, at least, may want to sell all
their clothes right away or at least take them off.
Haruka, wearing only her panties and playing one handed, kept glaring at
Happosai and betting wildly, running through her large pile of chips far too
quickly. She seemed to bet on every mildly good hand she had in her anger,
and was far {to : too} easy to read.
Happosai had apparently realized the same thing, and for the very next hand
he immediately bet ten chips right off the bat. Everyone folded, and the
cards were dealt again. Again Happosai bid ten chips immediately, forcing
all the girls to fold. No one had enough chips to meet his bids, save
Setsuna, who seemed to be biding her time. It was obvious he was bluffing,
but from the way he was staring at {Belldandys : Belldandy's} two remaining chips, it was
obvious what he was after.
Belldandy sighed. "He must have had a terrible life to be in such pain all
the time."
I get the feeling that that insight may be part of the key to getting
Happosai to release them.
Belldandy sighed. "Oh... he thinks this is what he wants... but it's just
going to make things worse for him. I just... I wish I knew how to heal
him... take away his pain... maybe he'd let us go then."
Caine gave his son a glance. "I do not doubt that she is here. I sense...
great evil is about." He frowned. "I do not believe I have ever felt this...
kind of evil before." He looked at his son. "A
Japanese {Demon : demon}... you said?"
Ami woke up again in a small cage... different from the last one she'd been
in. It was slightly larger, and smelled new. {Out : Through} the cage's door she could
smell trees, the wall opposite a viewing area, apparently for the general
public. The sounds that way were unmistakable. An inexplicable urge had
woken her, cutting even through her slumber, and she felt strange. Her
dreams had been... vivid, but she blocked them out as she tried to
concentrate on the sounds around her.
< An English tour group I suppose.> Ami reasoned. < The guide's English is
very good.>
Then that rules out the US. :}b
Ami rose with only slight difficulty and began to pace her cage in
agitation, something burning deep within, her tail swishing behind her. <
This... is not good, not good at all. What am I doing here... wherever this
is? How long was I asleep for?> She moved her neck slightly up and down. <
Still hurts, but not {barely : nearly} as badly... I suppose It's been a day or two at
least. Why was I transferred here? I'm sure I was at the Tokyo Zoo the last
time I was awake... They must have drugged my food for the plane flight.>
With escape in mind, she began examining her enclosure more carefully. As
she moved under one of the trees, however, she realized that she was not
alone. A large black shape was laying {: indolently} on one of the larger of the tree's
branches {indolently :}. Ami backed up in surprise.
Ami's eyes darted open and she stared at the rocks and grass before her
hollowly. < No! He's married too! What am I... why am I thinking about...
men... now?> She couldn't help but recall an old fantasy of hers, replaying
the night she had first met Johnathon Dwire. She had found him in his house
cat form, hurt after a {Youma : youma} attack, and had brought him back to her home to
nurse him back to health, completely unaware of his curse. Many times after
that, Ami had played with the idea of having accidentally splashed Johnathon
with some hot water that night... and what might have happened if she had.
From there her fantasies had taken many different paths. Johnathon had not
been married at the time, she had felt no guilt at the dreams, although
after his marriage to Kasumi she had filed that particular fantasy away.
Now however, she found herself remembering each of those fantasies in great
detail.
The best one was him helping her with her advanced physics homework.
Ami shook her head once more, forcing herself to stop. < No! It's not
right!> Her mind, however, simply threw up alternate fantasies in place of
the ones she was trying to ignore. Ryoga-sensei's image came to her and she
sighed. He WAS an incredibly well built young man... a perfect specimen of
young adulthood, at least physically, with those little fangs that seemed so
adorable on his innocent countenance. She had gotten a peek at him in the
buff, months earlier, after they had returned from the dark kingdom and she
and Mars had transformed him back into his human form. It had left her
speechless. His baby pig form was adorable of course, but when she though of
it she immediately pictured herself in her panther form, picking Ryoga-pig
up by his {bandana : bandanna} with her teeth, and then jumping them both into a furo.
< Oh Kami-sama!> Ami realized in a sudden moment of crystallized horror. <
I'm in heat!> Throwing the male panther ignominiously to one side, Ami
rolled to her feet and stood up on all fours, quickly loping away from him
to the far side of the pen . < What's wrong with me?> Ami asked again,
berating herself. < I should have figured this out half an hour ago. The
symptoms were obvious! I can't let this cloud my {judgement : judgment}.> Agitated, Ami
paced back and forth over a short stretch of grass, keeping one eye on the
larger male at all times. < That one
was trying to... mate with me. It intimidated the smaller one, and it...
knows I'm in... in season.>
Ami {catalogued : cataloged} the physical sensations she was feeling as coolly as she
could. < Oh my... I really am. My body... aches... like I'm on fire. I
haven't been this aroused... ever. It's different... much different than I'm
used to... but it can't be anything else.> She moaned softly. < Oh
Kami-sama! It's so bad. Does Luna have to go through this? It's awful!> Ami
moaned again, a bit louder, and both males perked up their ears and started
heading toward her. Ami froze in terror. < No! What did I do? I called them
somehow?> She moaned again, louder, then skittered backwards as the two
males hurried toward her even faster.
Ami turned with {his : him} and growled as he tried to mount her once more, slapping
him away with her paw when he got too close. < Oh no you don't!> She thought
fiercely, hackles going all the way up her spine in anger and frustration. <
I don't care how much this body wants it, you AREN'T my type!> The larger
male continued to circle, not taking the hint, and Ami started to get more
and more frustrated, moaning again deep in her throat as the ache she was
feeling started to become even worse. < Why? Why won't he leave me alone?
Can't he tell I'm not {intrested : interested}?>
Ami watched the smaller panther warily{, :} as he approached her, but rather
than try and circle around behind her, or even simply coming up to groom
her, he stopped several feet away and laid down, still facing her, and
staring at her with a quizzical expression on {it's : his} face, as if {it : he} was trying
to figure her out. Ami slowly lowered herself to the ground as well, keeping
her eyes on him, and tried to rest, the constant strain she was under having
started to really wear down her nerves. Half an hour passed, and the smaller
male drove the larger off three more times, each time doing so quicker than
the time before, until the larger male finally seemed to completely lose
interest. Instead of claiming her himself, however, the smaller male panther
simply watched her, acting almost like a black furred bodyguard rather than
a male interested in mating with her.
Using 'it' for an animal is common, but in this case, Ami is
uncomfortably aware of his maleness.
Peter motioned to Michael. "Come on, let's find somewhere to talk... we need
to plan this thing out." The two men smiled and nodded to Ami, then left the
building together.
Just because they've made plans doesn't mean they can't be unsure who
is who when they rendezvous in the dark. I liked the zen moments in
the draft next chapter.
Ami started to the sudden sensation of something very close to her face. She
started backwards, opening her eyes only to see the face of the smaller of
the two male panthers only inches away, staring into her eyes as if looking
for something. She stared back in confusion, a look that he seemed to match.
Ami watched as the young male panther (she had the impression somehow that
{it : he} was perhaps just grown to maturity, although aside from the size, she
wasn't sure how she knew that.)
Ami hesitated, then slowly nodded her head. < Oh good.> The voice in her
head said in a relieved tone. < I wasn't sure if that would work. Most
panthers can't really understand very much when I try and talk to them....>
Ami blinked in confusion and the panther looking her in the eyes ducked his
head in embarrassment. < Not that you're just another panther. I knew you
were something special as soon as I first saw you.>
That's still a good pick-up line. As long as they are at the zoo,
she's a really cheap date too.
Ami nodded in agreement. < That's true. I still find it strange that we've
met like this. It really seems like an incredible {coicidence : coincidence}.> The spark of
hope increased, as did the fear, but her mind refused to say why.
Midnight raised an eyebrow. < Did I ever tell you that you're strange, Ami?>
He winked at her. < Besides, I'm sure your mother will love me. Aren't I a
lovable fellow?"
He is, but it may take a bit for Dr. Mizuno to get used to him. It's
a bit like "Guess Who's Coming to Dinner".