Here's some input I've received.
Opinions?
Yes. You shouldn't post private replies publicly. *Very* bad
form.
That said ... as Howard pointed out, pretty much the whole first chapter
has been done quite a few times before.
I don't, however, agree that your writing skills are not up to it.
One purely personal comment: I strongly advise against referring to
female-Ranma as "he". *Especially* when there are male and female Ranmas
present. I realise that this is intended to realise Ranma's internal
perceptions (he's a guy, whatever form he's in), but it does make things
a lot harder for the reader; and anything that adds an extra barrier for
the reader is something you should consider, reconsider, and re-reconsider.
And then, if at all possible, eliminate.
Cheers,
Angus