God, I haven't C&C'd anything since...forever.  I'm such a bad person.  In
retrospect, not much to make a fuss about, but anyways...

----- Original Message -----
From: "Jeanne Hedge" <oldowl@rcn.com>
To: <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Saturday, February 08, 2003 1:02 AM
Subject: [FFML] [BGC][FanFic] Spin Cycle

[snip]

A quick check of the bedside clock revealed the apparent cause of this
non-commotion - the power was out, and had been so since 5:17 that
morning.

Curious, can you tell from a clock whose power is drawn from the outlet the
time of a power hit?

She dug through her chest of drawers, through the linen hamper, peered
annoyedly into the baskets of both washer and drier, and discovered it
was worse than she'd expected.  She was out of clean underwear.

Not a total disaster, she'd done without plenty of times before, but a
girl did have standards after all.  She could hear her mother's voice:
"Always wear clean underwear.  You don't want them to think badly of
you if you have an accident."  OK, she'd do laundry.

Unfortunately, one of the things she liked least about her condo was
that there was no room for clothes lines or drying racks on the roof,
she didn't have a balcony, and she didn't have a really good place to
hang clean laundry to air-dry inside her apartment.  All of which meant
she would have to pay a visit to a laundromat.

Real life inspire this fic?  Just a guess.

"Welcome to Suzuki Laundry," the 'bot greeted her, much to her

Puns!  I love puns! (well, at least I think it's one)

Damn thing's so single minded, it's acting almost like a rogue boomer,
part of her brain observed.  Another part of her brain observed "her"
granny give a wave as she left the building, the last of the group.
All clear, time to get out herself.  Would it be safer to head
upstairs, to "pachinko" and warn the old man?  A third part of her
brain noticed the boomer heading back in her direction, and she decided
whatever she was going to do, she'd better do it now.

Odd to me, I think.  At this point, I would not be completely concerned with
pachinko man upstairs, and I wouldn't think Linna would give that guy a
second thought afterwards.  Because as you say below...

She rolled across the floor to the foot of the stairs, intending to go
up.  Boomers on rollers weren't likely to do stairs, after all.

In any case, just minute details, I suppose.

"Spin Cycle" is still a tentative title right now. It may be changed - Dr
Raven suggests "A Little Cheer for Linna"

Incidentally, I did my own laundry today, so naturally I have a couple of
ideas but hey, the subject is what it is, and all of those ideas (which are
gravitating around soap) were bound to be cheesy.  The title you have on
looks good.

Good piece, all in all.  I suppose I could be more critical, but not much to
be difficult about. :)
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