Finishing some of the November mail now:

3184 CE
70th Year After Purification
7th Year of the Reunification:

3rd Year of Permutation

Princess of Crystal Tokyo, Small Lady. Though the term

Small Lady maybe a bit of a misnomer now that she'd grown.
Sixteen years old, with her birthday a few months away, she
was, like her mother, a bit of a late bloomer.

And frankly, not too bright, as well as being clumsy. They were truly peas
in a pod.

Her sudden

growth spurt at the age of fifteen left her at five foot
four inches and still growing. She was starting to become
the very image of a beautiful young princess.

The growth hormone therapy was doing wonders.

    Usagi noted that even half-finished, Neo-Queen
Serenity's sketch of her husband was starting to look
really well. If she weren't the Queen of the world, the
young princess thought, she'd probably make a great
artist, which she was. She smiled at the thought. She
remembered reading about her mom's previous occupation
before ruling the world: a manga artist with quite a few
best-selling hits under her belt.

Especially the Overfiend Series.

    After the Reawakening and the Purification, her
mother's manga creations, already expensive to collectors
and enthusiasts, were considered as holy artifacts by some
people and the stuff's

'stuff' is very slangish. 'and their prices' would  work fine

 prices went up astronomically.

Especially those with her mother's autograph. She had
managed to read all of them,

'every one of them' sounds better since you use 'all of them' again at the
end of the sentence.

borrowing from Aunt Rei's

extensive manga collection and she loved all of them.
They had ranged from romance, fantasy, horror, etc. Name
the genre, Usagi Tsukino wrote it. Ironically enough, her
mother wrote only one series with a magical girl in it. It
was one of her first successes and made her name in the
businness.

business

All of the rest shared all

The rest shared (would be better)

 the elements that

made them bestsellers: wonderful characters you can't help
but love, well-made plots that made sense and were
believable and, of course,

gratuitous sex and violence.

 the gorgeous art. There was

also a second level to it that she had noticed when she
read the old tankoubons. The stories had a depth and
understanding of the human condition that just grabbed
the reader and gave him or her an insight into it. They
made the reader think.

    She looked up at the clock and noted that it had
already been an hour and they still hadn't arrived at
where they were supposed to be going.

arrived at their destination. (less wordy)

    All she knew that

knew was that

    "Mom, you're talking like Sherlock Holmes. I hate it
when you talk like Sherlock Holmes. I had enough of that
when he showed up last month."

Yeah, the old heroin addict could be tiresome. :)

Actually I can't remember what it was he used. As I recall it did make him
moody.

    "Opposite?" Her mother sugested.

suggested

    "Harder? I remember one of the newspapers nowadays
describing me as ruling with a velvet-gloved iron fist,"
the Queen said with a smile, "Intelligent? I remember a
time when I was a failing at Japanese, Usagi-chan.
Nowadays, I am fluent in fifteen languages. When I was
a teenager, I would never have even dreamed of getting
a Ph.D. in Political Theory. Along with my degrees in
Literature, Philosophy and History."

Now I see why she became queen: With those kind of degrees, it's not like
she could get a real job. :)

    "The person we will be visiting taught me
everything. Sensei first taught me how to learn and
how to love to learn. Then we started on from there.
Along the way, I met every intelligent person that
has ever lived:

Err. No. She met many intelligent people that were famous. There is a
signifigant difference. :P

 The matriarch of the Tsukino family sighed a long-
suffering sigh

family released a long-suffering sigh

 "Better, yes, and we're proud of you for that."
Ikuko personally thought it was that Mizuno girl's
influence and she silently thanked the kami for small
favors. "But they're not good enough for a university.
You do want to go to college don't you?"

 The question was met by nervous silence.

Usagi: I wanna rule the world, not go to college.

 It was shaping out to be a bad day.

shaping up to

*    *    *    *    *    *    *    *    *    *    *    *

 The ravens cawed at her as Usagi looked up at the
iron gate that barred her from the large estate beyond. The
pair of them gave her regarding looks, as if they were royal
guards considering a petitioner to a queen.It

need space after period

 "All you have to do is answer three questions,
Tsukino-san. Then I will determine whether you are worthy."

 The statement had a weird tone of finality that made
Usagi nervous.

heh. It does.

Author's Note:

The "godesses" are now complete. Well, they're godesses
in a cosmology that is a synthesis of Lovecraft, Hodgson,
Haggard, Blackwood, Machen, Tipler, Isamov, Wollheim, and
de Chardin. Really weird shit.

Yes, yes it is. But it can be made to fit together, given the right weave to
the tapestry of storytelling.

Nice work. Glad I finally got this.

D.B. Sommer



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