I've been reading this series since you posted the first chapter, and thoroughly enjoyed it.  But this . . . you have exceeded all expectations.

I don't have time for detailed C&C, and others seem to be providing it, but I would like to make one comment.

     "Why?" Nabiki returned to the room, helped by
Ukyou who was holding a damp cloth to Nabiki's forehead.
"What does he want with Kasumi?"

     "He . . .left a . . .note," the monk whispered, one hand
fumbling at his waist. "In . . .my . . ."

     "I have it," Akane said, pulling a crumpled, bloody
piece of paper from a pouch at the monks belt. Across a sheet
of torn paper, in a bold scrawl, Genma had written his
demands.

     **'Souun. You have my package. I have your girl.
Let's trade. Too slow, too bad.'**

I think Ranma is in for a bit of dissillusionment where Genma is concerned.  This could get messy.

Looking forward to more.

Defender of the Light
Elite Mage
junior member of the Inner Circle of the Mages Council

Contrary to popular opinion, magic and science do mix.

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