Ragun P. Moody wrote:

$And back to the first chapter of this fun little series...

And the last public C+C I need to get to, I think:

is
all. And this idea has been on the backburner for some time. So close
your
eyes and cover your ears...

$And open your fly...

Heh. Cute.

Prologue
that.
There was also the fact that had Kasumi not done it, Akane would quickly
volunteer to take her place, and then it would be over for all of them.
No,
it was simply better this way.

$One of the things I always get a kick over when reading your stories
is the frequent, fun way you use lines like 'No,
it was simply better this way.'

Well, it is better. From one perspective, anyway.

more
endurance. It was hard to believe she was feeling the effects of the
previous night, or more accurately, the very early morning. Club hopping
with Yui and the girls was fun, but it had taken its toll.

$Hel~lo.  That's the line that grabs you by the eyeballs.

Needed to have it delivered early in the story to hook the reader. I was
hoping it was blatent, but not terribly so.

 It used to be she
could party all night long, grab a couple hours of sleep, and be wide
awake
and ready for a full day of school. Now all it took was a six pack and a
couple hours of dancing to tire her out; it was disgraceful.

$Eheh...  Nowadays, I conk out by eight-nine in the evening.

I'm still a nightowl myself.

that
Kasumi was out of high school, she was beginning to turn frumpy. She
hoped
that wasn't the case, but why else would she have no luck with guys
trying
to pick her up?

$If she'd quit trying to attract the pedophiles like she did while
growing up, I'm sure she'd have better luck.

Heh. She's only recently gone after older men. She's starting to give up on
younger men satisfying her the way she wants them to.

She
came to the door and opened it. The visitor was a plain-looking boy with
several plastic bags in his hands. There was nothing extraordinary about
him; he was a standard pimply-faced sixteen year old, one Kasumi didn't
recognize. She wondered if he was one of Akane's friends. It wasn't a
school
day, but perhaps she had agreed to do something early today.

$Heh, I can easily see that as 'but perhaps she had agreed to do
someone early today.'

In this, it's not an impossiblity.

idea came to her. She stood in front of him, undid the tie at her waist
and
opened her robe.

$After a moment, the Kasumi gasped and closed her robe.  "Oh, my, I'm
terribly sorry.  I must be having flashbacks to my days a a stripper."

Heh.

The boy's look didn't change as he went from staring at Kasumi's face to
her
body. Eyes riveted to her, he pulled out his wallet, handed her ten
thousand
yen, then turned and exited the house with a profound stiffness in his
stride.

$Heh, and he got the better end of the deal.

I would probably pay the same thing. :)

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<snip intro author's notes, because I didn't find any mistakes>

Just plain evil.

The girl stopped in mid-stride, turned around and walked up to the
panda.
"Well geez, Pop, why didn't you say that in the first place?" She helped
the
panda to his feet and brushed some of the street grime from his fur. Now
far
more respectful, the girl said, "Lead the way, Old Man."

$Cute.

Thanks.

Most of the passersby thought they could make out a look of
recrimination on
the panda's features when it stared at the girl, if such a feeling could
be
communicated on its animalistic features.

$Genma wondering where he went wrong?

Well, more like worrying Nodoka influenced Ranma too much. She did.

from their mother. Now that there was no hope of easing them into the
idea,
he decided to come clean and inform them. He knew he should have waited
for
a better opportunity when they might have been more receptive to the
plan.
Like when they were drunk, or something.

$I wonder if that idea has ever been done?  Not that it's actually
worth doing, but still.  I wonder.

Probably. I think everything has been done by now. Just that 90% of it was
executed badly. :)

Kasumi was the first to speak this time. "Is he older? I don't like
younger
men. They're so inexperienced."

$Heh.

Thought it would be a neat variation.

Nabiki asked, "Is he hung? I'm tired of going out with average guys. I
want
someone that's really going to make me feel it in the morning."

$Heheheh.

Here it's not so obvious.

Akane stared with disapproval at her sisters. "Come on, you guys.
There's
more to men than just how good they are at sex."

$Yeah.  There's how rich they are.

Nah. That would be Nabby's line.

Nabiki continued. "And then there's their perfectly gentlemanly attitude
towards you instead of looking at you like a piece of meat they want to
devour. Of course one must consider the reason for that being-"

$I completely missed this the first go through.  Now, though, it's
funny.

It was to imply it was Tofu with the way I worded it. Thought it would be
enough of a red herring.

Nabiki shrugged. "Yeah. Evidently blow jobs weren't enough to keep him
in
line anymore."

$I can just see Soun choking to death quietly in the corner.

Here not so because he has been desensitized to it. Though he still dislikes
it a lot.

"You have fleeced him out of a lot of money," Akane reminded her.

Rather than be offended, Nabiki shrugged. "Relationships are give and
take,

$They give, and I take.

She reciprocates, though one could argue she's really just using them.

of them." Akane shook her fist at the skies. "How was I to know those
losers
would hear about it and win all of their games by at least three
goals?!"

$Ataru Morobishi was on the team, and he's got that sixth sense.

Heh

The girls looked at him quizzically. Akane said, "How come? Mom talked
liked
this all the time at the dinner table and you never seemed to mind."

$Soun: But that's because I didn't know, Akane, I didn't know how
things were going to be in the future.

Well, he didn't, it's true.

out
even on top of her job) and so the girls were like this. It made for a
very
trying fatherhood.

"It's all that damned Happosai's fault," Soun muttered.

$Even Happosai had been surprised that the nine hundred year old moldy
scroll detailing the 'Perpetual Horniness pressure point' wasn't
bullshit.

Hehehehehhe.

Akane said, "What if he's some psycho that's left a trail of dead and
maimed
people behind him and has a bunch of people trying to kill him and he
fixates on me and I don't realize he's nuts and end up inadvertently
being
his accomplice when I try to defend him from those seeking righteous
vengeance?"

$Soun: Ill Met by Starlight this ain't.

Wondered how many would pick up on the reference.

Nabiki laughed at that. "Get real, Daddy. I am not going to pretend I'm
some
proper Japanese pristine virgin. If I think a guy is marriage material,
he's
getting to know what I'm really all about long before the wedding
night."

$Nabiki: 'Cause I'm all about the DICK, Bay-bee!  Ungh!  Ungh!

Nabby: It's as much about the Benjamins, though.

Ranma-chan "Ooo"d at the sensation. "Actually they're real, sort of,"
she
said, then reached out and felt Nabiki's breast. "I bet these are one
hundred percent natural, too."

$Heheh.  What Ranma should have done in the manga.

They thought had crossed my mind.

When the handling lasted longer than a mere poke, and traveled more into
'groping' territory, Nabiki pinched the flesh on the back of the
offending
appendage.

$Remarkably calm about it, though.

Yeah, not the sort of thing to anger her, and she did grope first. She
figures Ranma should be allowed to feel back, just that it went on too long.

did have something of a reputation after all (a well deserved one, she
would
admit), but she had vowed to change her ways for him. If she persevered
long
enough, he would see the truth, realize her sincerity, judge her to be
worthy, and then they would be together.

$Just plain wrong.

Wishful thinking blooms eternal.

whatever was done to Ranma to make her the way she was. It wasn't the
additions that were so bad, but knowing that parts (parts Akane had
enjoyed
on other men) had been cut off and tossed out in the garbage was kind of
creepy.

$Actually, they don't cut much off, but then again I'm being needlessly
nitpicky.

I don't know and don't want to do the research involved in it. *Shudder*

sixteen and didn't want to settle down yet, but there was no reason why
he
couldn't 'evaluate' the girls' marriage potential and get some serious
action in the process. After all, he was still young, and had the right
to
sow his wild oats.

$Into any available furrow.

Heh.

one place for any real length of time... well, there were always
complications of some kind that destroyed any chance of romance, let
alone
cheap sex. And the biggest complication of all had been...

$Ryoga, I'd imagine.

Yep.

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Akane was in a proper anger as she stormed into Nabiki's room. She saw
that
the owner of said room was occupying it, sitting at a desk as she chewed
on
a pencil and read over a book. Nabiki looked up in surprise at the girl.

$I think 'Nabiki...' should be in a paragraph of it's own.

I think I can fit it in as long as it's one line describing her action to
Akane.

"No, I was just going to wear something casual around the house," Kasumi
answered.

$Heh.

All in the eye of the beholder.

Kasumi looked at her aghast. "We can't just tie up any wandering
stranger
who comes around and use him as a giant sex toy."

$Nabiki and Akane:  Why not?

 She reconsidered her
words. "Well, yes, it is theoretically possible, but highly improper.

$No!

 If
word ever got out we'd have people trying to break into our home
constantly."

$Okay, now she's got a point.

Akane's not that bad. :)

Akane said, "I could tie him up and hang him upside down from a tree.
Then
we could start beating him with kendo sticks. We have enough of them in
the
dojo."

$Hey, that'd be fun.  You'd have to make Ranma be the one wearing the
blindfold, though.

Heh.

"I'll get the ropes," Akane said, quickly heading to the dojo

$dojo.

Odd, there were many sentances in this without punctuation.

Yeah. Not sure why I've been getting so bad about that.

term.
So Genma had been forced to steal away with the boy in the middle of the
night, hoping to take him away from her harmful influences before it was
too
late.

$Heh, I wonder if it was a 'Kenta's Horny Mom' situation.

Which is that from?

and
Soun to tie the old bastard up and chuck him into a cave with the
explosives, but perhaps in his haste to escape from the Master and his
demanding lifestyle, Genma had gone too far. Now with old age Genma was
starting to see some form of sound reasoning in living life the Master's
way.

$Celibacy?

 It was exasperating. Sometimes Genma wondered if life wasn't a giant
pendulum and he was stuck forever swinging back and forth from one
extreme
to the next.

$Mmm.  Must have been.

Could be. More on it later.

Soun shot to his feet. "I don't think they're starting a courting ritual
with him. I think they really mean to beat him senseless."

$Soun: Oh happy day!  My daughters have met a boy they have no
intention of having sex with!  Genma, we must have them married
immediately.

Heh. Actually they aren't interested in anywhere near every guy. Just enough
of them that it seems that way.

was
done. This was his big chance to get laid. There was no way he would let
it
pass up without a fight. Fortunately, he had 'a plan' to make things go
more
smoothly.

$This is going to get ugly.

Actually he starts out okay, but ends on a bad note.

Subtly Ranma rolled back the right sleeve of his shirt and turned the
inner
forearm towards his eyes. He had prepared a list of things to do to get
a
girl's interest. And he knew the list was legitimate and would work.
After
all, he had copied it right out of 'Cosmo'.

$Heheh.  I read that.  I'm always curious about the next 'one sex trick
I(as a guy) want in bed'.

The answers is, of course, being allowed to roll over and go to sleep when
we're done. :)

even if they aren't as big as mine when I'm in my cursed form." He saw
the
effect that had on Kasumi and Nabiki: disapproval and general amusement
respectively.

$If he keeps digging himself deeper at this rate, he'll be popping out
in Uruguay in no time.

He'll stop.

It was sure going to be an interesting time.

$Looking on the bright side already.  Not as stupid as he acts.

Nah. He tries too hard more than anything. Once he gets some, he'll finally
cut back some.

coming, but don't count on this being written regularly. I haven't quit
work
on my other fics, it's just that I needed a break on 'Things We Wish
For',

$Which I still haven't commented on, but have been following.

No prob. I understand you've been busy and I do turn things out at a pretty
good rate. Though I need to get started on chapter 4 before too long.

for only one true lemon scene per chapter, since I do not want to overdo
things, and I would like some semblance of structure and plot to the
story
to make it a more enjoyable read (as opposed to the Ranma's Girl 'Orgy'
series *Shudder*).

$I've read many decent oneshot lemons.  I've read damned few decent
lemon series.

Just decent series overall at times.

And as to Ranma and his quest to 'get some', come on, this is the
Ranmaverse. Even staying with three woman who are a bit loose in the
morals
department, you know it won't be that easy. ^_^.

$Anyone with taste would quit reading if it was.

Some have disagreed with that sentiment, surprisingly.

Thanks for reading.

And special thanks to TH Tiger for looking it over.

$Of course.  TH is well known in the lemon genre.

Made the mistake of mentioning some of the idea within to him and he
wouldn't let me let it go. :)

I must confess to a few reservations about this series when I first
read this chapter.  I know you could easily write this well enough to
make it a good read, but I was kinda getting into 'Things'.  Of course,
in chapter two you introduced Kuno, and I experienced whole-hearted
glee.  Now I'm more leaning toward Sextacular as what I'd most like to
see in my inbox.

Probably do two more chapters of it to placate some of the more irritated
readers desires to see things happen quickly. Two of the major concerns
should be addressed by then. I'll probably swtich back to 'Things' (whose
chapters are shorter). I want to finish that, and I do believe I'm halfway
through with the story there. There will probably be a one shot stuck in
here and there as well. Not Ranma, but other series whose ideas have been
simmering in my mind. You know me and the variety of things I like to write.

  Although, aren't we due for another chapter of

Avenging soon?

Avenging has been put to rest for the near future. The first and important
story arc is done with them forming the team. Not sure when I'll do more on
it, or even if I will. It's a good place to end things and let the reader's
imagination take off. I do have plans for it, but I have more ideas than
time.

Thanks for the uplifting comments. They are greatly appreciated and helped a
lot.

D.B. Sommer



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