Blech. Sorry it took me so long to get back to you. An addiction to Baldur's
Gate will do that to you. Just had to win the fame before I could do
anything else. Now at last I attack the backlog.

$Yeesh.  You'd think I dropped off the face of the Earth or something.
Same as always, this time going in reverse chronological order....

Heh. Cool. Saw you did the first half of this recently. At least chapter one
isn't that long, eh?

Surprise. It's out earlier than I thought it would be

$be.

Hah!  Found a mistake right off the bat!

Just added that on to the FFML. It's not on the actual copy. :)

the two of them the instant they laid eyes upon one another. It was the
red
string of destiny yanking on their pinkies.

$Heheheh.  Of course, USUALLY that line is between boys and girls, but
who are we to nitpick?

Kunou: Obviously a homophobe coined it, but I care not, for it can apply to
those who travel the path of man even more easily.

hearts beating in tune with one another. Their souls would know the
peace
that only true love could bestow.

$Heh.

And now he sounds like the Kunou we all know and love (in a platonit way,
not the way he loves male Ranma. ^_^)

 And they would have mad, passionate sex as
well.

$Heheh.  Good old yaoi humor.  One of these days I need to pick up
where I left off with Kagato's drooling over Tenchi.

Yeah. Get on that, darn you. I wanna read more.

An eraser bounced off his head. "Then you'll stand out in the hall!" the
teacher shouted.

$Good teacher student exchange.

He's jealous of all the chicks hitting on Kunou as well.

A hail of boos assailed the teacher as almost all of the girls told him
to
quit picking on Kunou.

$Heh.  Poor Kuno.  He just can't get a date no matter what his sexual
orientation.  Unless he's been showing the Kendo club the proper way to
use a bokken...

Nah. He's had boyfriends before outside of the club, but none that excited
him like Ranma.

esteem. In the beginning it didn't matter to her, but as time passed it
became increasingly obvious that she was not making any headway
throughout
the school's gossip line.

$Actually, that's a little confusing.  Once you know a girl is actively
screwing everyone that moves, it ceases to be a topic of conversation.
Why would they still talk about it?

Slow couple of months. *Shrug*

I compare to Akane?" And proceeded to give him a few licks.

Miki's response was to snort derisively and say, "You got a long way to
go
before you get as good as her."

$Ouch.  That's gonna hurt.

Miki is not a bright boy, no.

had
to go to the bathroom. Left protesting with a painful case of blue
balls,
Yuka exited the car and left the drive in altogether.

$And thus Yuka 'goes down' in history as someone not to be trifled
with.  ^_^

Hehehe. Nice pun.

And there was the catch. If Yuka slept with him first, she would spoil
him
and make him refuse Akane, or at least have Akane come in second in his
eyes. That would be a way for her to finally come out on top and have
their

$his opinion.  You use eyes again later.

Okay

and
from the number of men that had been eager to sleep with her, Yuka was
obviously regarded as very attractive. All she really needed was a
chance to
snag Ranma while he was alone. She was still trying to come up with a
solution when one presented itself for her.

$I wonder when she'll find out about Nabiki's little joke?

Or when Ranma will find out about it.

her
skirt and parted one leg so Ranma could have a clear view of the bounty
that
lay there. "And this is my pussy. Why don't you take a closer look?"

$Bah, this is almost exactly like a scene from an H-game I played a few
years ago.  Same dialogue, anyway.

Never played an H-Game. Sounds cool, though.

"What the hell just happened?" Yuka said, still in her pose with her
legs
spread wide.

$Sounds fine, but maybe:  her pose, legs spread wide.

Okay

private confines was evident; Yuka had mistakenly tried to seduce
someone
who was complete immune to her charms. It was another clear sign he and
Ranma were meant for one another.

$Heheheh.  Poor bastard.  All in all, this pretty much confirms my own
beliefs about lemon fics.  It's not how many people have sex, it's how
many horny people TRY to have sex.

That has a lot to do with it, I agree.

Ranma went to the cleanest sink to wash off his hands. Cleaning up
before
and after one jacked off was something that should always be done,
circumstances allowing.

$Moisturising, too.

Nod.

With a flick of the wrist, Ranma twisted the knob and held his hands
under
the spray. Instantly he was hit with cold water, triggering the change.
"Shoot, gotta pay more attention to what I'm doing," the now female
Ranma-chan grumbled.

$Didn't see that coming, I must admit.  I must be getting slow.

Hmm. Most others did. I didn't think I was being that obvious.

an accusatory glare. "Where is my beloved Ranma-kun?"

"He ain't your beloved anything, you limp-wristed fairy!"

$Heh.  Good thing this is Sextacular instead of Man among Men.  I
wonder what happened to that fic?

True. It's rather the opposite, isn't it?

Kunou leveled his bokken at the girl. "Save your excuses. I know that
you
have stolen my beloved Ranma-kun away through sorcerous powers."

$Foul succubus!

I might use that one later if he gets the magical implications of the curse.

realized
what Kunou was saying. "Hey, look, pal. Whatever my connection to Ranma
is,
I can tell you one thing for certain. He is not some fudgepacking
homosexual."

$Ah, the fun of being politically incorrect.

I miss it. Rightspeak... Uh, I mean PC, is perhaps one of the most evil
creations of the last decade.

of the bathroom, Kunou would have the advantage with his weapon. Out in
the
open, where Ranma-chan could use her mobility, she would be able to
dispatch
him with ease.

$I'd figure it'd be the other way around, actually, but hey.

I need an excuse to get them out of the bathroom.

quickly. Of course that would mean siding against Kunou, which Akane was
reluctant to do. She wanted to help someone, but didn't know who. She
really
wanted Kunou, but Ranma-chan was sort of being picked on here, and Akane
hated seeing people picked upon. And Kunou was acting like he was no
longer
interested in Ranma-chan anymore, which lightened Akane's view of the
boy-girl considerably.

$Meanwhile, the fight had finished up and everyone had gone back to
class.  A lone janitor prodded her with the end of his broom, holping
the strange girl would move so he could keep sweeping.

Heh. No. Her thought process was much faster than that.

Ranma-chan's hand lashed out just as she was falling, snagging the
bottom of
Kunou's hakama. The garment, never fitted tightly given Kunou's slender
waist, in conjunction with Ranma-chan's full weight, was pulled down and
around his ankles, leaving him with only his underwear -- in the form of
a
leopard spotted thong--

$Mmph.  Leopard spots are so tacky.  I like solid primary colors,
myself.

It's meant to be tacky. Beneath his veneer, he's a tacky dresser.

across the length of the ruined section, hands scrabbling and failing to
grip anything. With the second floor's wall to the outside destroyed,
there
was nothing to stop them from sliding out into the open air, only to
land in
the pool directly below, causing a huge splash.

$Heated pool, no doubt.

Nope. Ranma's staying a girl and delivering more fanservice.

While the others were distracted, Akane grabbed one of the
buckets --used
for punishing disobedient students--

$I wonder if that could be worked into some sort of kinky lemon scene?
Some middle-aged salaryman harkening back to his misspent youth.

Maybe, but not by me and not here.

her
breath before falling into the pool. Worse, she had to dodge falling
masonry
from the building's destruction as it fell into the pool after her. Most
of
the pieces of debris were large enough end up hurting or even pinning
her
under water. Death would be a rather ignominious end to her first day of
school.

$Or an entirely apt and fitting one.

I'd rather think not.

Ranma-chan looked up to see faces now filled every window of the school,
the
entire student body observing the events outside. Her view switched to
looking down. The martial artist grimaced as she noted that not only had
she
lost her pants to Kunou's deathgrip, but her boxers as well. A cool
breeze
sent a tingling sensation across her damp pussy.

$Things like this should have fanart.

I'd be willing to accept such.

Now competing chants of "Take it off!" and "Put your clothes back on,
tramp!" filled the air. Ranma-chan noted this was easily the second
worst
school experience she had ever suffered in her entire life.

$Heheh.

And of course, we'll mention the first one before too long.

but
more than enough to encourage women to want to become acquainted with
Kunou
better. At least he wasn't as large as... Well, she didn't like to think
about that one.

$Oh?  Ryoga, maybe?

All will be revealed in time.

her
top snagged on the end of the bokken. The backward motion was strong
enough
that instead of stopping her, it ripped completely off, leaving her
completely naked. She made a gurgling sound of protest at her unclothed
state.

$Fanservissss....

All the audience can handle.

"Only if I land it." Ranma-chan thought she could, too. For all of
Kunou's
obvious skill, he seemed more offensive that defense oriented. The blows

$than defense

First mistake I've caught in a while.  This is really clean.

Had someone look it over. Prereaders always help.

"Nurse's office is on the second floor, right wing, number 201." Akane
continued stroking Kunou's body in an effort to 'revive' him.

$Heh.  Akane's not a very sympathtic character here.

She's in love with someone that doesn't return that love. What could be more
tragic than that? :)

Neither is Ranma,

so I suppose it evens out, but I'd really like to start seeing one of
the characters as someone to like, rather than someone to jeer and laugh
at.

Hopefully that will happen in time. Right now I'm just introing the cast.

looked like he wouldn't be a half bad lay, at least if he stopped trying
so
hard to get laid. It wouldn't have been so bad if it wasn't so painfully
obvious he was desperate.

$Yeah.  A positive feedback loop.  The harder you try, the harder it
is, and the harder you try.

Yep. Not that I would know anything about that. Nononono.

Why did it always seem to be the hard way?

$But I thought she liked hard things?

Hard, but in a different way.

[End notes: And here endth chapter 2. This was one of the reasons
chapter
one was so short. I knew this chapter would be way longer, and I wanted
people to get adjusted to this world at first. Hopefully a somewhat more
dangerous, (and light on his feet)

$Just plain wrong.

Cool.

 Kunou will make for an interesting
variation.

$This Kuno ain't no pansy, that's for sure.  Although what does it say
that he turns gay and is suddenly an actual threat?

Gay guys are just plain cool. Look at Rupert Everett. :)

 I sort of liked the idea of Kunou actually being a school idol
for a change and respected and desired in the way mainstream Kunou
always
wanted to be. Of course, the only way it would really be fun is if this
Kunou didn't care for such attentions.

$Yeah.  Nobody wants to see someone actually enjoy life.  That's kinda
boring.

Yep. Much more fun to watch those we know and love in torment. ^_^

Thanks for reading.

$Quite entertaining.  It's good to see you writing lemons again.  It's
been a long time since the last thing with Silver, which is the last one
I can remember.

I did a couple of others on the Florestica Webpage and not here. But this
isn't an appropriate place for them. And they are mucho different from
Sextacular.

Anyway, good chapter.  Very smooth, very polished.  Kuno was a treat,
easily the most entertaining piece I've read in a while.

Glad you liked it. Thank a lot for the help. Will get on to the next one
soon, I hope.

D.B. Sommer

Backasswards I go!

Again.  -_-

-Ragun















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