Subject: [FFML] Re: [C&C] Re: [Fanfic][2nd draft][Fusion][SM/Spiderman]The Amazing Spiderwoman: Chapter One.
From: Schobronics
Date: 1/9/2003, 12:04 AM
To: ffml@anifics.com


Aaron E Nowack <anowack@juno.com> wrote:

Also, isn't Usagi's fathers name Kenji, not Kenchi?  I could be wrong
though...

Yup, Kenji is correct.

"That was odd," Usagi said thoughtfully. "I 
wonder why 
'her highness' stopped Flash?"

"Beryl's not a queen, Usagi," Ami said, said, using napkins to get 
as much 
tomato sauce out of her hair as she could.

...Beryl... as a junior high student.  The mind boggles.

She's not a queen - maybe a princess? Aeka's videoclip "Oujo-sama to
oyobi" comes to mind - and would be very fitting... ^_^

Of fifteen warriors, proud and strong who opposed those dark forces. 

Need a comma after strong.  Suggest also changing to "strong, opposing
those forces."

Hmm... fifteen?  Let's see... nine Senshi (assuming you count Sailor
Moon/Princess Serenity), Endymion and his four guardians makes
fourteen...  who would be the fifteenth then?  Beryl?  Or am I totally
off base here? ^_^

The 8 usual Senshi with Sailor Moon/Serenity and Tuxedo Mask/Endymion, accompanied
by Sailor Chibi Moon and her 4 Asteroid Senshi (former Amazon
Quartett) would be 15. I left the Starlights out, but they're from a
different solar system so they shouldn't count... ^_^

Ja
Christian "Schobronics" Schober
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