Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Thu, 26 Dec 2002 19:28:57 -0500 KaraOhki <karaohki@snet.net> wrote:
The lines at the doors of Furinkan High School's
gymnasium were {huge : long}, and getting longer. Not only
was every student trying to get in, but the
doorways were jammed with students from many other
schools in the Tokyo area, as well as many Nerima
residents. Soon the gym was packed to capacity,
and everyone else was turned away. People jammed
the available seats, looking expectantly at the
array of equipment out on the gymnasium floor. The
crowd grew quiet as the lights dimmed, and a lone
spotlight turned on in the center of the floor.
Then Tatewaki Kuno stepped into the light. He held
a piece of paper in his hand. "My father asked me
to read a message to those in attendance this
afternoon, since he has been unavoidably detained
{elsewhere :}."
A strange metallic sound began, and the lights came
up. The crowd looked, looked again, and began to
laugh. A host of mechanical ostriches had entered
the gym{, :} and were advancing on the audience.
"Oh, how cute!" cried Azusa. "Come to Mommy,
Pauline!" She ran directly up to a bright yellow
ostrich, which was blinking its huge mechanical
eyes at her. The creature opened its mouth,
displaying some very interesting teeth. They were
normally seen on a razor cutter in a barbershop.
Seconds later, Azusa sported a very cute crew cut.
She collapsed on her partner, crying hysterically,
which prevented him from defending himself from the
advancing bird.
That sounds like a very Big Bird.
The youma laughed itself to death three minutes
later.
Hey, if it works, what's wrong with it?