Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Mon, 23 Dec 2002 18:11:48 -0600 Tom Keehn <zinyadel@hotmail.com> wrote:
In the darkest depths of the estate, existed a room filled with
vials of chemical solutions, jars of volatile solids and the
occasional radioactive material sealed in a {radon lined: lead-lined} container.
In this darkness, a single {pendant : hanging} light flickered overhead to
banish the shadows to the corners of the room, a constant struggle
as each flicker brought the enemies of illumination crashing back
in.
It's hard to line a contaner with radon since it's a gas.
The fit passed, but the humor remained. Kodachi spun away from the
table, her white labcoat snapping behind her. "A little setback,
nothing more," the girl declared, her brown eyes burning with {: such} a
light of their own{, :} that they might have been visible even in total
darkness. "Blackmail will have no hold if Ranma comes to me of his
own volition."
She stopped in front of the {laden : ladened} shelves, examining the rows for
the chemical she would need. She unconsciously tugged at the open
front of her lab coat, the act threatening to spill the pens out
of her breast pocket. In contrast to the dingy, white coat,
beneath it a sable layer of inert material covered her from neck to
toes. It was a wise precaution if she happened to spill anything,
and gave her a cold tingling feeling against her skin which she
enjoyed.
There was a footstep at the door, causing her to toss {her head : a look} over
her shoulder as she set the container down next to the calcium
nitrate. Her brother stepped out of the shadows, a glazed look
over his eyes. In his arms rested an unconscious girl with short
hair and a yellow jacket emblazoned with the name of her school,
Seisyun, on the front.
That first sentence doesn't seem quite right.
"What's this?" she asked picking up the small bottle. She turned
it over her hands, the word 'Desire' marked on the {lable : label} pasted
to the black glass container. She glanced in the direction
Kodachi disappeared, wondering if she should return it now.
Akane turned suddenly, her face bright with a smile. "I'm sorry, I
forgot to tell you," Akane apologized with a warmth that was
overwhelming. "Konatsu is staying with Shampoo. He's been a real
{good :} help for their business. They are presently at the seaside
shop preparing to open it for the summer season."
Nabiki walked down the hallway with only a towel wrapped about her,
while using a second towel to dry her hair. "I still can't believe
she drugged me too. I thought her poisons were reserved for {: her}
brother and Ranma-sama," the middle Tendou remarked, continuing down
the hall and out of sight.
{Ciaow : Ciao}
Poor Mariko.