I'm looking forward to seeing more, but it's not clear right now exactly how 
the Chobits universe is contributing the to the story.  Is Anthy going to 
turn out to be a Persocon or something?  If the nature of Anthy is 
important, you might want to extend the first chapter to cover everything 
the first episode of Utena does, including Utena defeating Saionji and Anthy 
moving in with her.

Why is the Student Council reciting the Lord's Prayer in the elevator, and 
why the emphasis on "deliver us from evil"?

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