Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Fri, 20 Dec 2002 14:51:04 EST JLee100441@aol.com wrote:
Ranma, Monique, Yuka, and Akane were still standing in the hall. Ranma
found it rather odd the way Akane was glaring at him. The way he saw it, it
was the Tendo girl's own fault that she didn't {go : get} to class on time.
Monique {bleached : blanched}. "I hope he not try that with me."
"I wouldn't worry." Said Akane, her face somewhat {soften : softer : softened}. "The challenge
was to date me. He doesn't seem to like you, so he probably won't want you
dating here."
[(Sccceeeechh!) Now {here : hear} this! I{: ,} Takiwaki Kuno{: ,} here by declare that if
anyone wishes to date the fare Akane Tendo. They must first {ride : rid} our noble
school of the kokujin Monique Pincer! So I command!]
[Now {here : hear} this. I am Ranma Diggers. For those of those who don't know,
I'm Monique's boyfriend. If any of you primates even think of touching her,
I'll feed you your ass. If you don't think I can then I'll gladly meet Kuno
on the soccer field after school. That is of course unless Mr. Kuno is...a
COWARD!]
"AARRRRGH! I will be there! And I will be ready to do battle and end that
{cretins : cretin's} life!" screamed Kuno.
{Yep, and I'll be there too. Making a fortune!} {Thought : thought} Nabiki. She could
just see the yen coming in.
"I can't believe your boyfriend's going to fight {Kuno." Said : Kuno," said} Shori. She
had decided to join Yuka and Monique for lunch.
"Yes, this is what Ranma {do." Said : do," said} Monique. "He always likes to {play : be}
hero."
"Well he better watch himself. Kuno's the second best in the school and
he's really good when he's {angry." Said : angry," said} Akane.
"Yeah{: ,} tell us."
"Who're Penny and Gina?" {Asked : asked} Nabiki {joining : as she joined} the group.
"Wow! Just like Romeo and {Juliet." Said : Juliet," said} Yuka.
"I hope not, no want Romeo and Juliet {end." Replied : end," replied} Monique.
"{Interesting so : Interesting. So} do they ever bring anything {back. : back?}" Monique nodded and
pulled something from her shirt.
"Well it small {one." Said : one," said} Monique{: ,} slightly embarrassed. Nabiki nearly
choked. That diamond was the size of a cockroach and she said it was one of
the small ones!?
"S-Softballs?" {Asked : asked} Nabiki as her mouth nearly dropped to the floor.
Monique nodded her head. Nabiki quickly thought about that and decided that
she would have to work slowly. Ranma and Monique were both too valuable to
make a quick profit off of. They were also much smarter than Kuno, so she
decided it best if she stayed on their good side.
"Umm hello, what going on?" {Asked : asked} Monique looking back at {: the} boys.
Nabiki looked at the dark skinned girl for a moment then continued.
"Yeah. You'll find out I'm involved with lots of stuff. I run betting pools,
loans, information {service : services}."
"So you dare to challenge the might of Kuno. Know that when I defeat you
I shall remove that kokujin from our noble school and {clam : claim} my pig tailed
goddess."
She might not want to be clammed.
Ranma, for his part, was shaking mad. {Worthy of his loin? GROSS! You { : are}
going down stick boy.}
"Now you will face defeat under my mighty blade. Have at thee!!" And
Ranma did, starting one of the most one-sided fights Nabiki had ever seen.
The crowd could only wince as Ranma invented new ways to put a human being
into unbearable pain.
And I thought he was fighting Kuno instead.
"You helped {: me} make a lot of money today. Why don't you come over to my
house? I'd like to thank you two with dinner."
"I don't know{, : .} I don't want to trouble you."