Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Tue, 17 Dec 2002 22:37:10 +1300 R E <ranma_e@hotmail.com> wrote:
This fact troubled her greatly. She was used to having some sort of idea,
however vague, of what the Hunters were planning. A pause of this duration
was unprecedented. By her reckoning, Ukyo would not bother either of them
again for twenty years - perhaps longer - but the Hunters were long
overdue. The only possibility she could think of was that the enemy knew
something she did not; this did nothing to ease her concerns.
So Ranma already knows that Ukyo won't stay dead. The process was just
accelerated this time.
"I wanted to apologise to her," Akane explained, pressing her thumbs
against each other as she sat in the murky alleyway. She glanced up at
Ranma, a wistful expression on her face. "I wanted to let her know I'm
sorry she's dead."
But she's getting better.
The hatch looked far too thick for her to pierce with Garyoutensei - she
stepped over the surface slowly, carefully looking for any sort of crack or
weak point that she could exploit, but could see only solid, unyielding
metal. That left only one option. She chewed her lip for a time, weighing
up the pros and cons; on one hand it would get them into the facility, but
on the other hand it would tell the {hunters : Hunters} exactly where they were.
You have capitalized Hunters most of the time, but not always.
"They've never had to worry about keeping me -out- before. Normally, they
try their hardest to get me -in- to a facility like this. They've been
trying to catch me and bring me in for a very long time - they'd never
expect me to be stupid enough to come barging into one of these places."
Excellent point.
One by one, the Hidari blinked, their pupils shrinking as they focused
their eyes upon Akane. As one they stepped down to the floor, each staring
dispassionately at its target. Akane swallowed, fighting off a sudden
feeling of revulsion.
It seems like this would have been a good time to cut them in half.