Wow! NTHT fic. I wonder if it'll be as morosly depressing as the real
series. :)

Now and Later, Here and Somewhere Else
- A true to life self-insertion.

Oh, SI. Usually not a good sign. One day I shall do one to prove this. :)

By Gutierrez

Chapter One

Aaron sat against the smokestack and sighed pulling

sighed, pulling

his drawing paper

and pencils out of his book bag.  It had been a long day.  "I never
should have transferred.", he sighed as he started to scribble outlines
on his page.

Since he was outlining a polar bear caught in a whiteout, the work was going
rather quickly.

 The sun was starting to set so he'd have to work fast to

get his drawing done before dark.  Hearing footsteps Aaron

footsteps, Aaron

 stopped for a

moment and looked around, a young

around. A

boy darted between a couple of the

closer stacks and started to climb one.  Aaron sighed, "Crazy little
shit.  You'd think they'd know that's dangerous.

Let him plummet to his death. The terminally stupid should be allowed to
die. It's another sign of the fall of civilization when you don't let
people --that are literally too stupid to live-- end their existances. :P

  Oh well, like he'd

understand me anyway." Trailing off he went back to drawing.

No paragraph breaks in this, BTW. You really need them.

  His first

day in his study abroad session had not gone well.  His Japanese was
weak and broken, and so were his teachers

teachers'

moment.  A surreal blue covered the world around it as where he was
seemed to detach from it.  From the dead silence chaos broke loose.
Giant metal serpents appeared from nowhere destroying buildings.   As
they wrapped around the stacks he could hear screams. Everything around
Aaron started to collapse.   There was a sharp pain to his head and then
darkness.

yes. Hell is a good way to describe it.

---

Chapter 2

Moaning, Aaron slowly picked himself up.  He found his hair crusted with
his own dried blood and his body covered in cuts and bruises.  He could
only assumed

assume

 some timed

time

had passed, but it was hard to tell from where

he was.  The acrid aroma of dried urine and the stench of decay filled
the air.

Oh. He's in Cleveland.

  Aaron could only make out his surroundings to be some kind of

prison cell.  The air was dry and he was parched, he could barely speak.
Biding his time looking around the cell, he could find no food or water.
"Trespassing in that industrial complex isn't sounding so hot right
now", Aaron thought to himself.  Hours crawled by before he heard
footsteps.

Have the measure of time be more ambiguous. Adds to the surrel air.

  Slow and steady the moved down the hall.  A couple of men in

uniform

describe the uniforms at this point.

soon arrived at the cell door and one started to open it.  Aaron

struggled to stand but as he did the other man pulled up and cocked a
rifle.  Aaron got the idea and collapsed back on his rump.  Then men
slowly approached and when close enough one kicked Aaron swiftly in the
ribs.  Falling completely to the ground Aaron gasped, and the second man
lifted him up yelling in his face.  It was something about a girl and a
pendant, but it wasn't helping the men spoke only Japanese.

Heh. Cute distinction of the language problem. Of course I think the blonde
was from America and spoke the same language (Shun?) did. I could be
misremembering, but I'm uncertain.

 "I don't

understand what you're saying.  Do you speak English?",  Aaron pleaded.
The men looked strangely at Aaron and growled.  He caught only one word,
"Worthless," before a rifle butt knocked him unconscious yet again.  He
awoke in front of a row of rifle bearing soldiers, and suddenly the
general barked a command.

This has the feeling of one of those old 'Choose Your Own Adventures' where
you made the wrong choice really fast. I assume this was written in a highly
depressed state. If not, it passes well for such. Actually, you did find a
workable and realisitc outcome to any male ending up in the NTHT world,
though the option of adding the new character to the army is as likely if
they thought the newcomer was workable canon fodder.

Ambivalent about this as it was an abrupt, downer piece. felt like it was
written a little too quickly, but it does have a depressing atmosphere to
it.

D.B. Sommer

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