Subject: [FFML] Re: [fusion][R1/2/Avengers] Avenging Chapter 11 Part B
From: Brian Randall
Date: 12/9/2002, 11:21 PM
To: DB Sommer
CC: ffml@anifics.com


DB Sommer wrote:
And on to the next part:

Brian Randall wrote:

Doesn't offer to carry her around? Never know when a pocket-super-hero
will come in handy.

Heh. No. Too much risk she'll end up crushed, given all the tumbling Bucky
does.

	She could hide in Bucky's cleavage, and zap anyone who tries to grope 
her. I think Bucky would like that last part....

Hawkeye was on the point, had an arrow nocked, and was already
pointing it
directly in the middle of her adversaries. Bucky and Daredevil stood
slightly behind the archer, while Iron Rose remained in the back.

point -- pointing

I'd replace 'on point' with 'at the fore'.

Nah. Old jargon I learned at the academy calls for it to be called point.

	Actually, I was only suggesting that because you already use 'pointing' 
in the same sentence. You could switch 'pointing' for 'aiming' or 
'targeting' or the like, as well.

That shield's pretty handy....

In every sense of the word.

	Damn skippy.

Ya know... from what I hear, that's actually quite painful.

could be. I never struck a girl in the breast to find out. I bet it would be
painfully for me in any case.

	... quite likely, Mr. Sommer.

*snicker*

Another case of a character acting as author's spokespiece. :)

	Chartruse.

What happened to Bucky's "We need to work together" attitude?

Reverting to type. Changing one's stripes isn't easy. Sides, she had to
flash some tit and is irritable.

	Fair enough.

Hmmm. Tarou vs. Giant Man.

Nope.

	I'd actually like to see that one -- given that Tofu's a martial artist 
of fairly high caliber....

I wonder if it'll turn into a piece of Akane's jumper when Thor reverts.

Nah. Plot contrivance, I call it. :)

	Would be interesting, though.

his face. Blood poured from a split lip. A hard right into the jaw, and
several shiny white teeth flew from the mouth and bounced off the master
control panel.

... damn.

Yep. Getting graphic, I am.

	How novel.

	;)

I seem to remember this being a staple of comic books, though, so
spot-on, as usual.

Actually in this case it make sense. I have been mentioning the increasinly
bad shape the building is in. Likewise it serves as plot device for both
Elektra and Bucky as well.

	Of course. :p

	I wasn't criticizing it, as much as commenting that I've seen this scene 
before -- or similar -- in movies, comics, etc.

Hahahahahahahahaha- No.

He'll be back.

Just like Oasis.

The music group? I guess anything is possible then if they are back
together. :)

	Er... no, Oasis from Sluggy Freelance.

	Just don't give us a blond Thor vs. Cyber-Mandarin. That'd be... bad.

Black hair, eh?

Yep. Dye job. The Hand didn't want her to stand out too well.

	Hehe....

	I like how in older anime, only the main characters have exotic hair 
colors. Mystery!

Irony. Gotta love it.

	Indeed I do!

Wasp flitted about enthusiastically. "Oh my, that sounds good. I want to be
a real super hero. Count me in." Her family was just going to have to get by
cooking and cleaning on their own from time to time.

Heh.

Showing Kasumi isn't all give here.

	Well, I was just thinking that 'her family' boils down to 'Nabiki and 
Soun' in most cases, as Akane will be gone when she has to leave, along 
with Ranma, and if Genma still plays the animal side-kick.... ;)

trouble." And she was going to make it all one massive charitable
contribution and write it off her taxes.

HAHA! I like that.

She always keeps her business savvy, all right.

	I like it. ^_^

I liked it a lot. It was a fun read, and some of the jokes were
completely priceless. The A-bra-mination... hehe....

Was great. ^_^

Good job, Mr. Sommer!

And thank you for all the C+C. I really appreciate it.

	Always welcome, Mr. Sommer. Just sorry I'm so backlogged at the moment.

D.B. Sommer

Special thanks to
Chris Horton
Gary Ee
William Morse

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