As usual, used the grammar suggestions:

Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Mon, 18 Nov 2002 19:25:28 -0500 DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:

Yep, what I've been threatening to do for more than a year now has

finally

seen the light of day. 'Things' isn't abandoned, I just needed a break

is

all. And this idea has been on the backburner for some time. So close

your

eyes and cover your ears...

Be afraid.

If you haven't learned that lesson concerning reading my stuff by now...

Kasumi retied the robe and closed the door. Oh yes, she still had what

it

took.

Looks like this ain't our grandpa's Kasumi.

Ah, nope.

The girl shouted, "No way, you stupid old tub of lard! I want to find a

cure

to my condition! The only reason I came back to Japan was because you

told

me you knew someone that could fix this! I should have known better!"

She's speaking more formally than I'd expect.  Is this one of the changes
that will be readily apparent? :}b

Nope. I don't always write Ranma's speech as being that rough.

The girl unleashed a satisfied grin at her handiwork. "That takes care

of

that. Now to figure out a way to get back to China." She turned her back

to

the panda and began to walk off.

Still lying on the street, the panda held up a sign. *He has three

teenage

daughters.*

Eyes in the back of her head too?

When it comes to girls :)

But then Akane turned around, wrapping the towel around her body, and
stomped out of the bath.

Akane said, "Look, from now on tell your boyfriends to put the occupied

sign

on the bath when they're using it. I walked in there and the jerk got a

free

show."

Exellent variation on the old theme.

Thanks. One of things I was going for in this chapter.

Akane stared menacingly over the fallen boy. "So what should we do with

the

peeper?"

Shouldn't Akane's towel have come loose somewhere during all that?  Twice
the distraction for Ranma.  If he's concious, he'd be getting an eyefull

at

this point.

Decided to save the distraction when Kasumi flashes him.

Ranma panicked. Ideally he had hoped the girls would fight over the

right to

be engaged to him, making it easy to sleep with all of them. That they

were

all attractive made him burn with desire for that outcome even more. But
with all of them balking, he had to think fast before permanent damage

was

done. This was his big chance to get laid. There was no way he would let

it

pass up without a fight. Fortunately, he had 'a plan' to make things go

more

smoothly.

Fortunately?  They never work.

True, but hope springs eternal.

And as to Ranma and his quest to 'get some', come on, this is the
Ranmaverse. Even staying with three woman who are a bit loose in the

morals

department, you know it won't be that easy. ^_^.

Considering how things go in most Ranmaverses, it's darn near impossible.

Wouldn't be much fun otherwise, as I'm apt to say frequently.

Thanks for the help.

D.B. Sommer

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