Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Mon, 18 Nov 2002 19:25:28 -0500 DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:
Yep, what I've been threatening to do for more than a year now has finally
seen the light of day. 'Things' isn't abandoned, I just needed a break is
all. And this idea has been on the backburner for some time. So close your
eyes and cover your ears...
Be afraid.
Kasumi retied the robe and closed the door. Oh yes, she still had what it
took.
Looks like this ain't our grandpa's Kasumi.
That's enough notes. On to the fic. And yes, the opening is similar, but the
changes, as evidenced in the prologue, will be readily apparent.
The girl shouted, "No way, you stupid old tub of lard! I want to find a cure
to my condition! The only reason I came back to Japan was because you told
me you knew someone that could fix this! I should have known better!"
She's speaking more formally than I'd expect. Is this one of the changes
that will be readily apparent? :}b
The girl unleashed a satisfied grin at her handiwork. "That takes care of
that. Now to figure out a way to get back to China." She turned her back to
the panda and began to walk off.
Still lying on the street, the panda held up a sign. *He has three teenage
daughters.*
Eyes in the back of her head too?
Soun began to sweat. This never became easier to deal with. True, Ayumi had
possessed a voracious sexual appetite --it was one of the initial reasons
Soun had married her-- but even he couldn't keep up with her near limitless
endurance. After a couple of years of monogamy, he allowed (insisted,
actually) his wife return to her job in order to leave him with enough
energy to do things, like eat and breathe. Despite her innate tendencies he
had hoped the girls would have been somewhat more normal when it came to
their sex drives --well, they {were : were,} compared to their mother-- but they still
tended be very energetic, and certainly as liberated in attitude as Ayumi
was. He had wanted them to grow up more reserved, but Ayumi would have none
of that. She insisted they be as sexually easygoing as she had been,
claiming it was one of the keys to her happiness in life. He hadn't the
energy to fight the matter (literally, since she could still wear him out
even on top of her job) and so the girls were like this. It made for a very
trying fatherhood.
But then Akane turned around, wrapping the towel around her body, and
stomped out of the bath.
Akane said, "Look, from now on tell your boyfriends to put the occupied sign
on the bath when they're using it. I walked in there and the jerk got a free
show."
Exellent variation on the old theme.
Akane stared menacingly over the fallen boy. "So what should we do with the
peeper?"
Shouldn't Akane's towel have come loose somewhere during all that? Twice
the distraction for Ranma. If he's concious, he'd be getting an eyefull at
this point.
Ranma panicked. Ideally he had hoped the girls would fight over the right to
be engaged to him, making it easy to sleep with all of them. That they were
all attractive made him burn with desire for that outcome even more. But
with all of them balking, he had to think fast before permanent damage was
done. This was his big chance to get laid. There was no way he would let it
pass up without a fight. Fortunately, he had 'a plan' to make things go more
smoothly.
Fortunately? They never work.
And as to Ranma and his quest to 'get some', come on, this is the
Ranmaverse. Even staying with three woman who are a bit loose in the morals
department, you know it won't be that easy. ^_^.
Considering how things go in most Ranmaverses, it's darn near impossible.