Andrea Hill wrote:

Please critique this!  I want input!  I want opinions!  I need encouragement!  Just one fan, pleeeeeeease!

	Well, it took some time (backlog, ya know), but I finally got to this one.

	I like it, honestly. It's a different take on something I've seen before, 
and I find the characters as you write them interesting. I'm afraid I 
don't have a lot of specific commentsthat haven't already been 
addressed, so I'll just make this one:

	Tsubasa? Ninja? Don't you mean Konatsu?

	;)

	Keep up the good work -- I'd like to see more of this.

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