Some comments follow.
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A good, solid opening, with a smattering of typographical errors. Nice.
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You missed a word or two in there, I think.
*snip*
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Nice analogy there.
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Heh.
*snip*
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Mmm, this whole paragraph doesn't do much for me. You might want to spice it
up a bit.
*snip*
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Overall, rather interesting, though I'm not entirely sure where this is
intended to go, and a lot of the symbolism was admittedly lost on me. You
might perhaps try to clarify a few things about all this.
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