I know the repetition of the opening section is intended to show her absent mindedness, but I imagine some might be irritated by it nonetheless. I don't particularly care, although I personally wouldn't handle the scene like that.
You might want to think about that.
Anyway, I certainly enjoyed it (without having seen the anime), and found it to be well written and entertaining, while containing emotional punch. There was a bunch of Japanese words that I didn't understand, but I expect that's par for the course. I'll be certain to read the series as it develops.
As a sidenote, was I the only one who kept expecting that the girl would go to a beach and shoot an Arab? Maybe Existentialism is finally getting to me...
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