An interesting concept, even if a bit rehashed (for comparison's notes, 
though the motives don't match, it initially struck me as something like 
Running Man meet Escape From LA). It could go over a lot of intersting 
things; how Saotome got into this match, what this Executive could possibly 
hold over his head that would make him stay and commit such atrocities, and 
then the drama that will no doubt play out when he realizes he has to kill 
Kasumi (Or anyone else, you're pick).

Forgive me if you were looking for a grammar look-through, but I don't feel 
quite up to it. What I did want to get across is that I look forward to 
seeing this story in action. Thanks for sharing.

- Kenji M.

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