You wrote:

As always, it was Pluto who first

who was the first

to know the world

was coming to the end.  The ripples of the Timestream
pulled at her, telling her that something was
desperately wrong.   It was only through sheer force
of will and her years of control over the Garnet Orb
that she maintained her sanity this time.  She
maintained a blank expression, but inside, all she
wanted to do was weep.  She knew the Moon Kingdom she
so loved wouldn't survive, and it wounded her deeply.

Well, all things must pass in time.

"Neptune is next; she is the Senshi of the Sea and
Self, and she is the one who reigns in Uranus whenever
a large battle is called.  Her power is more subtle,
but still dangerous.  She is the one who knows who

how

alone, since their battles rarely required the power
of more than one of them, and there were too many
battle to fight.  Something about the aqua-haired
woman's face was tense, and Uranus wished she were
familiar enough with her to ask exactly what was
wrong.

The three Outer Senshi stood in dark Charon Castle,
the magic of their calling keeping them warm despite
the sub-zero temperatures.

and the fact they only wear tiny little skirts.

"A shame I can't show it, I meant to say.  Show the
anger I feel, and just scream at the unfairness of it
all. I see it,"

I'm sure all the people and youma you've killed over the years felt the same
way about it being unfair. :)

 Uranus stated softly.  Her eyes slit

slightly and she seemed to melt into the shadows
before returning back into the gloomy candlelight.  "I
may not have either of your precognitive powers, but I
know that what we've protected for all these centuries
is coming to an end, and no matter what we do, we
won't have the power to change it. I can see it now,
but I'm so far below it.  The future. it's

future,

stand to stay still any longer.  She had so much
energy, and it wouldn't be contained.  These were the
very last hours of her life, and she hated spending
it, cage

caged

She looked at little

at the

black back pack she had been

given upon her first transformation.  It was something
she carried with her at all times, knowing that
someday she would have to use it.  Even though it
looked innocent enough, she knew that when she broke
the seal on it, it would summon the most feared
creation of the Silver Millenium- The Soldier of Death
and Destruction,

Duke Nuke 'em

Sailor Saturn.

I was close.

They arrived in the shadows, hiding from the other
senshi like they usually did.  The Dark Kingdom was
massing on the outside, wall

outside wall,

 but no one inside that

castle was aware.  Inside, the ball was still going
on, and Uranus had to hold back.  Everything in her
wanted to march forward and bring warning of the
disaster.  "It's too back

too bad

"We did what we could," Pluto said.  Her eyes were
becoming cold and distant, and Uranus knew that she
was already separating herself from the kingdom she
knew was lost.  "Now the consequences are upon us."

The three outer senshi stood in the blooming
courtyard, hidden in the shadows.  The white light of
the moon turned their surroundings into a dreamy
silver landscape, and for a second, Uranus wondered if
this was just a dream, and she would wake up on
Miranda.  Still, their was something about the way the
moon dust rose in the air, causing her to almost
sneeze, and how the Neptune

drop 'the'

"You won't. you need to summon Saturn!  Just don't
expect to get me to use your bloody black back pack!"
Neptune said.

Uranus grinned at her, feeling like she was showing
her fangs.  "And spoil me fun?"

my fun

Neptune smiled.  "What about that don't you
understand?" Neptune asked.  "You don't get what I
want."  Neptune's eyes gained the focus that had been
fading from them.  "I sense you- I always have.  It's
something sensual."  She smiled softly.  "It's
because. the wind always stirs the sea."  Her lashes
fluttered closed, and the senshi uniform faded,
leaving only Amphitrite in her white dress, with a
blossoming red rose of blood.

Uranus: Fine, I'll be a dyke and we can horizontally mambo together.

dismissing the Glaive until it would be needed.  "Your

You're

In this, Sailor Saturn is called the Senshi of Death
and Destruction.  That's intentional; it's part of the
whole reincarnation deal. in her next time around,
Sailor Saturn isn't just a sleeping force, but a
Senshi who fight beside her sisters- thus, she becomes
the Senshi of Death and Rebirth.

Sort of like Eva. Gotcha. :)

Nice work. Interesting how you tied the elements of a song into it.
Enjoyable work of the end of the Moon Kingdom from almost an 'outside'
perspective. Prose flowed well.

D.B. Sommer



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