Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Sun, 6 Oct 2002 05:40:34 -0400 (EDT) Frederick Herriot <fherriot@yahoo.com> wrote:
Silence falls as the Tendou patriarch considers that, then he
gazes intently at Nabiki. Despite his daughter's questionable
reputation, Souun knew that when Nabiki {did gave : gave : did give} out information,
it was always the truth. "But how?" he wonders, crossing his arms.
"Save for that one time when Ranma-kun suffered that head injury
that made him think like a girl..."
"Verbal denial. But deep down, I think she realizes *this*
time, she isn't going to win out," Nabiki muses. "And that'll hurt
her bad. {Much that : As much as} I personally don't want to see Akane-chan
hurt, it's long since time she learned the world won't always bow to
her wishes. We've coddled her for far too long," her eyes narrow.
"When we should've been forcing her to see the mistakes she was
making, we let it pass or, especially after she came into our lives,
dumped all over Ranma, making it look like it was her fault. That's
part of the reason Ranma doesn't want anything to do with us, Dad.
She won't let us hide from the truth anymore."
Souun quakes slightly as Nabiki's words pierce through the
barriers he subconsciously erected to blind him {from : to} his family's
shortcomings, then a reluctant nod twitches his chin. "Yes, that is
true, isn't it? And with what happened this morning between
Ranma-kun and Akane..."
"Surely you must have some feelings for Ranma-kun, {daughter : Daughter}."
"If you had a chance to do it again, Nabiki -- and if Ranma-kun
was {: not} so affected by Jusenkyou, of course -- would you have pursued
him?"
"Exactly," Miree nods. "The seeds of the Church of Lum were
laid a decade ago when Oogi dai-Zkuhsbagh, the son of a trading
{magistrate : magnate}, was rescued from the horrors of Uru's Terrible Swamps
by Lum. By the time he returned to the Homeworld, the basic tenets
of the Church he envisioned were set in stone. Once that happened,
it was only a matter of time before he convinced enough people to
properly launch a Great Awakening. Over the next five years, the
Church expanded its power and influence to the point where it became
the First Church of the Homeworld. And then..."
"Yep," Ranma sits, then nods thanks as Shirayuki hands her a
plate of piping-hot food. "Turns out, your dad subbed the cask meant
for the wedding with a cask of normal spring water. Guess he
realized Oyaji'd be a pig about it when he found out the cask was
around. Then, after Nabiki found out the truth about what Jusenkyou
did to me and told Souun about it..." she shrugs, waving to Shinshi.
"Look what he did{? : !}"
"I accept your welcome with {gracious : great} thanks," Miree nods in
return.
"Some sort of psionic bond, a real {passive : massive : strong} one, between Darling
and a girl named Ranma Saotome, from over in Nerima," Sakiko
explains.