Subject: [FFML] [C&C]Addendum for Chapter Five: Beginnings End (rough)
From: Michael A Chase
Date: 10/8/2002, 11:36 PM
To: "L.S McGill" <lsmcgill@hotmail.com>, ffml@anifics.com


Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Thu, 03 Oct 2002 11:45:27 -0400 "L.S McGill" <lsmcgill@hotmail.com> wrote:

Zhu Shu sighed.  "Zhu Shu understands.  She spend week at Tomobiki.  Have
deal with Hentai {squad : Squad}."

Monday morning was a change of pace as it was Zhu Shu's first day of school.
{  :}Her grandfather's permission had arrived on Sunday along with paperwork
detailing her "schooling".  She smiled at Sung Po's signature on the
paperwork.  At least it seemed the local magistrate did not hold her choice
to try and not have to marry his son against her.  Her {Grandfather : grandfather} had also
sent her a letter to tell her that Ke Lun had met with him and advised him
of her current quest.  She had his blessing and approval.  He also informed
her that Pin Ke had showed up in town, looking for yet another rematch.  She
had been irate to find Zhu Shu gone.  Lin Ke had been, as always, apologetic
for her sister.  Zhu Shu had sighed at that.  One day, she'd have to deal
with Pin Ke once and for all, only her friendship with Lin Ke had prevented
her from paying Pin Ke back for all she and Ying Ying had endured from the
bullying girl as they grew up.  The girl from the next village had a lot to
answer for, and not just from her.  Shan Pu had had stories of Pin Ke to
tell too ....

"But nothing.  Ranma seem forget that Zhu Shu not flower.  Can protect self!
{  :}Zhu Shu maybe take you if really tried."

"Because a guy's not supposed to see a girl naked {untill : until} they're married!"

Akane looked at Ranma and blinked.   {FInally : Finally} Akane shrugged.  "You showed me
what happened when you taught Ranma about {girls : being a girl}.  I- I just-" she trailed
off.

I liked Zhu Shu clearing the air there.  She'd have to do something or just
watch the cycle of insults grow.
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