Chad Hutchings wrote:
A damn good fic
Chapter 1, End.
Alright. I'm skipping the line-by-line on this one, because I see it's
gotten a lot of replies, but also because of your formatting (I would
suggest indenting or at least putting an extra newline between each
paragraph). My aged eyes are suffering.
The story was worth it, though.
General technical notes: When you use 'I' as a term of self address, it
should always be capitalized. There were a number of minor spelling
errors in the fic -- I'd suggest running it through a spellchecker to
clean it up a bit, if possible.
I really like Futaba's characterization. I found Ranma's interesting. All
of the characters, however, seemed a bit... off... except for maybe
Futaba and his family.
And you know what?
I think it works pretty well that way. So these characterizations are not
what I would think of when I think of the manga, but they work for this
story, so I think it's pretty good. :)
Well..this is the rough draft of The Matchmaker,
chapter 1, and I'm sure you found it to be very
different from Memoirs and Zhenmaoh (which is on hold)
to say the least.
Please E-mail comments and Criticisms to
Inu_Ranma@yahoo.com or respond on FFMl.
Thank you!
Inu.
No problem. Catch you at Fanime panel next year again, hey?