Boredcollective@aol.com wrote:
On the website, this will probably show up as part six.
We're keeping the numbering simple on the site since
we've already overdone the chapter part stuff with NETTG.
Besides, it'll make the site look bigger this way. ^_-
Indeed.
Moving right along, then, we shall have more of the
rather long-awaited third part of this series. This series
was the result of a conversation with Jason Hanks while
we were working obsessively-compulsively on Nuke 'Em
'Till They Glow!! Chapter 9 in 1997-98. It took months to
get some of the details worked out, but for including so
many already-used-to-death ideas, it came out fairly
original.
The thing was, I'd already seen waaaaaaaaaaaaay
too many fanfics that just repeated what happened in
the original series verbatim, albeit usually with a new
character here or there, typically an Otakufic SI. So,
I figured I'd just end up adding mine to the mix to see
if I can surprise anyone along the way. There are
conservative kinds of comedy and there are fearless
kinds of comedy. We're trying for the latter here, but
we're not quite there yet. We'll work on it, though. We're
always working on it.
So, a quick "what's gone before." Well, ya see, Um...
It's still in the works, but basically, Ranma's met up
with Ryouga and Genma's gone to school in the guise
of Chibiusa. Read all about it at:
http://rakhal.com/florestica/ben-oliver/index.html
Any and all suggestions for improvement are quite welcome.
So, moving right along, then...
Alrighty. Since I forgot to mention it last time, my suggestions are just
that, and you can feel free to ignore them. :D
Continued from (3/?)
^_^
*Bam-whack-pow...*
Elipseses... raaaaah!
While the part-time shrine maiden slash martial artist thought
of ways to deal with her dilemma, Ranma opened one eye a crack and
peeked at the lesson being taught, just in case they had gotten to
the interesting part yet.
'slash'? Why write it out in this instance?
Then again, perhaps it was the eyepatch and the skull and
crossbones that covered the front of his black outfit, or the way his
red-lined cape flapped in the breeze, even though the windows were
closed and the air conditioning hadn't been used in months. Whatever
the reason, it appeared as though he carried a huge load on his
shoulders; a load only he could ever possibly hope to bear.
Hehehehe....
Harlock let out a long sigh and looked out of the window again
for a few seconds, shaking his head. "Oh, my friends," he whispered
to himself, "what a hard life this truly is..." With a sharp turn of
his head, the man focused his attention back on Ranma. "Saotome-san,
what are the merits of a True Man?"
More elipses. I'll stop commenting on them now.
The raven-haired girl thought for a second. "Well, one of the
P.E. teachers isn't so bad. Son-sensei's pretty laid-back." She
paused. "Though he does like dying his hair blond a lot when his
friends drop by..."
Ack... ack... ack....
After a moment of sitting up on the branch, holding her hands
up to her mouth, she squeaked in glee and started bouncing happily
from branch to branch to gather nuts and berries.
That was... unique.
"Ummgh?" Usagi replied thoughtfully. Her face was the site of a
desperate Civil War reenactment, with the Federal forces of gravity
and exhaustion firmly pressing down on the side of the South. One
eyelid, caught in the battle between the Union and Confederate forces,
struggled to hold its position like a good Confederate soldier. Then
the Union made a brilliant counterattack at a critical moment, boldly
pushing south and winning the war. Slavery to the chains of
consciousness were severed all across the girl's brain and unity
was restored. "G'night. Usagi sleep now..." She slumped back down
onto her arms.
Beautiful.
I really mean that.
There were probably less embarrassing ways to die, Catalystor
silently mused as the shot hit dead center on her chest, but for the
short life of her, she couldn't think of any.
Less, or more?
It took a while for Luna to convince the girl to go, but in the
end, she succeeded. Usagi was so flustered that when the conversation
was done, she failed to notice the storm clouds gathering in the sky
above.
^_^
To Be Continued...
Okay, who wants to see Usagi show up at Furinkan and
find 'er "princess," eh? ^_^
Think we've got enough rabbits in this story yet?
Not for you.
Hopin' to hear from y'all!
And now you have! Sorry for the lack of comments, this section felt
shorter, and very solid. Nice work!
Until later...
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Benjamin A. Oliver
boredcollective@aol.com
"We are the Bored. Lower your shields and surrender your fics.
We will add your standup and slapstick comedy to our own.
Your humor will adapt to entertain us.
Resistance is and always has been: Futile."
Collective works available at:
http://rakhal.com/florestica/ben-oliver/index.html