Jason Liao wrote:

It's been awhile.  Welcome back.

On Wed, 18 Sep 2002, Anand Rao wrote:

Heart of the Immortal

Heh.  I still remember this one. ^_^

By: Anand Rao (jouve25@hotmail.com)

Ranma 1/2 is owned my Rumiko Takahashi

For previous chapters, go to
http://tannim.anifics.com/Heart_Immortal/Immortal.html

This is definitely a rough draft.


Chapter Seven: Lost Boy, Found Sempai
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Ranma sat and stared at the spiral.  He remembered the old woman's technique
clearly.  She had fought defensively, leading him down a spiral path, and
then. . .

Rather different than the diary chapter. ^_^

He slumped down and a determined grin grew on his face.

and -> as?

Shampoo stepped into the kitchen of the newly opened 'Cat Caf�' and sighed.

I'm using an ASCII only client, and it looks like you've written Cat Caf8.

"Why is this necessary, Great Grandmother?  Why not just grab husband and go
home?"

"I don't think he'd appreciate that, Granddaughter."
"But, if I grab him in certain way, then..."
Cologne shook her head.  "It just doesn't work like that."
"Oh."  Shampoo tossed aside the lemon fanfic that she had been hoping
would contain accurate reference material.

Cologne smiled as she slowly stirred a simmering pot of ramen.  "The
son-in-law was stronger than I expected; more stubborn too.

Hmm...you capitalized Great Grandmother, but not son-in-law.  I suggest a
consistant capitalization scheme.

That is a consistent capitalisation scheme, if a complicated one.
Put "the" in front of "Great-Grandmother" and it becomes "great-grandmother.
Remove the "the" from "son-in-law" and it becomes "Son-In-Law".


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