Okay, for those of you saying Belldandy was OOC, how does this sound:

Revised wish scenes:



Rain is supposed to be a cleansing, a refreshing of the Earth as it washed 
down the dust and fed thirsty crops.  All of her life, Shan Pu had liked 
rain.

Until she came to Tokyo.

Now, it was just another sign of the depression she had sunk into.  She had 
never thought any place could ever be as huge as Tokyo.  Nine days of 
searching high and low had revealed not a single clue to Ranma's 
whereabouts, and she had only explored a small part of the city.  It was far 
worse than she had anticipated, and she had not counted on the problems she 
had encountered as a girl alone in Tokyo.  While she had been safe enough 
from the one mugger she had met, she spoke poor Japanese, and what little 
money she had had soon been gone.  Nothing in her life as an Amazon warrior 
had prepared her for a place like this insane city.

At present she was setting in the rain on a low railing, overlooking one of 
the city's drainage canals and feeling like she would never redeem her 
Honor.

After losing Ranma  in China, it had been logical to suspect he had finally 
returned home, so they had come to Tokyo by boat. It had seemed like such a 
smart suggestion for her and Zhu Shu to split up and search the city for 
him.  In retrospect, it had been anything but.  She had come no closer to 
finding her groom, and had not seen her blood-sister in days.  Now, to top 
it all off, she'd been caught in the sudden rain and was stuck as a cat till 
she found hot water.

She growled in aggravation, once more cursing the arrogant prince who'd....

"Ya know, you're feeling schorry for yourself loud 'nough to wake the dead." 
  A slurred voice said from behind her.

Shan Pu turned, the voice coming from so close behind nearly making her jump 
out of her skin.   The woman it belonged to was a sight that made her blink 
several times in hopes of banishing the vision.  It didn't.

The white haired woman seemed to be having trouble standing steady, and 
stank of rice wine.  She was pretty enough, and decked out in a very 
revealing outfit, but the tattoos on her face were a trifle odd.  She 
stumbled to the rail and leaned over, nearly falling into the canal and out 
of her dress before righting herself.  Shan Pu blinked at her a gain as she 
gave a questioning mew.

The white haired women brushed her bangs back from her face and looked down 
at her.  "Oh, yeah.  I'm...  I'm... Oh yeah,  Urd.   Goddesh schecond 
class."  She slumped to the ground beside the rail.  "An' on pro... pro... 
probation."  She held out a bottle of sake.  "Want schome?"

Sham Pu sniffed the bottle, her whiskers curling at the smell.   Urd 
laughed.  "No... prolly not.  Got a cat's tounge... Cat's got your tounge."  
She giggled.  "Scho anyway... you got nothing to feel schorry for.  Now 
me... thas 'nother schory.   Try  bein' the host for tha' Lord a' Terror.  
At least _you_ didn't nearly destory tha' world!"

Shan Pu sighed.  A drunk.  Just what she needed on top of every thing else.  
She started to turn when she felt fingers grasp her by the neck and lift her 
in front of the drunk womans face.  She tried to turn to bite her,or get her 
claws into her, but try as she might she couldn't reach .

"Schimmer down, Schampoo."  The woman said, the shock of hearing her name 
used causing Shan Pu to stare at the self proclaimed goddess.    "I heard 
you in the bar, and I schaid to... to myschelf... I schaid, Urd... now 
there's schomeone who could use a little of the old Urd magic..."  She 
looked Shan Pu in the eye.  "Scho I came over...  Just for you!  Don't you 
feel special?"

Shan Pu gave her a rasied eyebrow.  Special?  She was being dangled by the 
scruff of her neck by a throughly drunk woman who was delusional, and she 
was supposed to feel special?

"I am not de... de... delusional!"  Urd protested drunkenly.  "I'm a goddess 
of  love!"

If Shan Pu could have crossed her arms, she would have.  If she wasn't stuck 
as a cat, she could show this crazy lady this was not how you treated an 
Amazon!"

"I... I can prove I'm a goddess."  Urd slurred, taking another slug on her 
bottle.  "You betcha!"

Shan Pu rolled her eyes.  She was stuck for the moment, but when she got 
free, oh the scratching Urd was going to get!

"I can!" Urd drained the bottle of sake and tossed it behind her.  She 
stood, staggering and stumbled to the center of the alley.  "Jus' watch!"  
She started reaching into various concealed pockets and pulling out odds and 
ends: sunglasses, a walkman, a few CDs, but not what she was obviously 
looking for.  Finally, failing to find what she was searching for, Urd 
grumbled "Dammit!  I left my ID schomewhere!"  She blearly looked at Shan 
Pu, obviously almost drunk enough to fall unconscious.

"Well, I guess I got one way left.  Scho tell me cat, wha's your wish?"

For Urd to put her down for one thing, so she could get on with looking for 
Ranma, and get away from the crazy woman.  She struggled again against the 
womans grip, but it was useless.  Urd was hanging on desperately.

"No, come on, really!  A real wish"  Urd was almost pleading.  "I can schow 
you I'm a real goddess. I can!  Wha's your mos' heartfelt wish?  I can do 
it, I know I can!"

Well, she wished that everything would work out for her and Ranma, but most 
of all she wished to be let go!!!
Urd blinked at her twice, then her eyes lost focus as the tattoo on her 
forehead blazed into light.  Shan Pu found herself  floating in mid-air as 
Urd's head tilted back and she stared at the sky, the blaze on her forehead 
growing brighter and brighter.  A wind kicked up around the alley as small 
objects started floating and Urd lifted off the ground.

Then a shaft of argent light shot towards the heavens, the glow so intense 
Shan Pu had to put her paws across her eyes, then as the light faded, she 
found herself on the ground again, looking as Urd collapsed to her knees and 
stared at her.

"Well, whadda ya know.  Your wish has been approved."  Urd said before her 
eyes rolled back in her head and she fell forward...


************************

Shan Pu stared at the unconscious woman and wondered what the hell had just 
happened.  Obviously, the woman really was something more than human, but 
exactly what she had no idea.  She had barely dodged out of Urd's way as the 
woman had fallen over, and had pushed her face out of a puddle, but now had 
no idea what she should do.  If the woman really was a goddess, it might not 
be a good idea to just leave, and it probably wouldn't do to give her the 
scratching she deserved for manhandling her like that, but...

The sound of a motorcycle pulling upto the end of the alley interrupted her 
thoughts, and Shan Pu hastely pulled back her extended paw and sheathed her 
claws.  She backed into a space between two trash cans where she could see 
Urd and evaluate the situation as the sound for approaching feet could be 
heard.

A absolutely radiant woman stepped into her line of sight, dressed in a 
flattering outfit similar to what she had seen on young adults all around 
Tokyo, with a loose skirt and long grey hair tied back in a tail.  Next to 
her, carrying an umbrella was another young girl, a little older than 
Shampoo, with long black hair wearing an oversized jacket and jeans.

The first woman bent down to touch Urd's forehead, and Shan Pu realized she 
had facial tattoos similar to Urd's.  Was this another goddess.

"Is she okay, Belldandy?" asked the younger girl.

"She'll be fine, Skuld.  But she's probably going to have a terrible 
hangover."

"At least we finally found her.  When she dissappeared like that, I was 
afraid Big Sis had flipped or something."

"I was too.  I know she felt guilty over..." Belldandy  broke off and turned 
to where Shan Pu was hiding.  "I'm sorry.  I don't know what ever happened 
to my manners.  Please forgive me, but I was so worried about my sister I 
didn't sense you.  You must be Shan Pu?  I'm Belldandy, and this is my other 
sister Skuld.  Won't you please come out?  I assure you we mean no harm."

Shan Pu raised an eyebrow.  How could this girl know her name too?

Belldandy nodded.  "I'm sure this must be confusing for you.  I am so sorry. 
  Usually, we meet clients far more formally.  I'm sorry my sister was 
drunk. She's had a very hard time recently."

Clients?  What ever in the world was she talking about?

"Oh." Belldandy said as Skuld busied herself rummaging through a trash can 
and tossing out odds and ends of metal.  "We work for the Goddess Relief 
Office.  We grant deserving mortals wishes.  Odd, though.  Urd's on 
probation, and as a goddess second class, she's not supposed to grant 
wishes.  But it was accepted by the Ultimate Force, so Father must have 
assigned her to you."

Shan Pu felt her head spinning, and gave up trying to understand.  She just 
wanted to get dry and find Ranma.

"You're more than welcome to stay with us for awhile." Belldandy offered.  
"Keiichi won't mind, and I can get you some fresh cream, or tea if you'd 
like to change first.  I'm sure we can come up with some clothes to fit 
you."

Shampoo looked at the contraption the younger girl had built to move the 
unconscious Urd and blinked, then shrugged.  It was obvious that they were 
more than normal humans, and supposedly, she had been granted her wish.

She looked up at the sky, and the falling rain.  It was certainly a better 
offer than just staying wet.

With a shrug, she walked over and allowed Belldandy to pick her up, and in a 
fairly short time found herself falling asleep in the goddesses lap as Skuld 
drove them all home...

*******************************




Urd groaned as the morning sun attacked her, bludgeoning its way through her 
eyeballs to laughingly sizzle her brain cells.  Throwing her arm up to try 
and block the grinning orb, just made things worse as she immediately had to 
lurch to the bathroom.

As she stepped out of the bathroom and made her way to the dining room, she 
found herself looking at a chinese gilr doing exercises in front of the 
shrine.  Curious, she headed towards the kitchen, hunting for her sister.  
"Hey, Belldandy!  Who's the Chinese girl practicing in the courtyard?"

Belldandy poked her head out of the kitchen, and smiled.  "Her name is Shan 
Pu. She's your next assignment."

Urd made a noise that might have been "Urk!" and froze, the sick look on her 
face more than just the hangover.  "Um ... Sis ...  I'm on _PROBATION_, 
remember?!"

"I know!"  Belldandy beamed, "Isn't it wonderful?  Kami-Sama is giving you a 
chance to get your license back!"

"Oh great," Urd muttered, her head pounding.  How Belldandy could see the 
bright side of what was sure to be a hellish assignment, she could never 
understand.  And how the hell did she get stuck with a wish case?

The phone rang.  Urd lurched around to stare at it in horror.

Oblivious to her sister's state, Belldandy called to her, "Urd?  Could you 
get that?  My hands are covered in flour."

Urd swallowed.  Hard.

Picking up the phone, she answered, "H-hello?"

Belldandy finished her dumplings and washed her hands, then went into the 
hall to see her sister still standing by the phone, her hair blown into 
disarray and a frozen grimace on her face.

"Urd?" a concerned Belldandy asked.

"I'm doomed," Urd croaked.

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