Subject: [FFML] [C&C] [Tenchi/Metroid][Chapter 1]Code Name: Predator ...
From: SkyeFire@aol.com
Date: 9/13/2002, 10:41 AM
To: Kyhdin@aol.com, ffml@anifics.com


In a message dated 9/12/02 5:39:18 PM Eastern Daylight Time, Kyhdin@aol.com 
writes:


    I can't believe it...he did it.  The crazy fool actually DID it.  And now 
I'm going to C&C it...
 
 "And she is of noble blood...of a sort," he continued. "Her grandfather is 
 the GP Comissioner and one of the most highly decorated war heros. It was 
his 
 unit that led the supression of the Protoss Uprising. The Royal Bloodline 
 would not suffer."

    SP:  Heroes.  
    And, hero of what?  The GP bowling league?  (:)  Sug:  "...heroes in the 
Known Galaxy," or something like that.
  
 "That's entirely beside the point," Ayeka said, glowering. "Peerage aside, 
 the child was concieved entirely on accident because she's too stupid to 

    Sug:  By accident.

tell 
 the difference between a bottle of lotion and a...ah...a sp....a DNA 
sample 
 and moreso, she's a klutz. If she marries into the family, she will 
embarass 
 us all."
 
 "Be that as it may, highness, your father is reaching the end of his term. 
A 

    I *think* "highness" should be capped, since he's using it as a direct 
address here.
 
 heir must be declared." Ayeka's eyes narrowed. To prevent the corruption 
 offered by the immense power and long life that being the imperial ruler 
 bestowed, each Emperor was limited to a thousand years on the throne 
before 
 they had to step down in favor of their heir. This limit was enforced by 
the 
 very Trees themselves who can and had withdrawn their power. "If no heir 
is 

    Tense mismatch.  Sug:  "...who could and had withdrawn..."

 declared, the Royal Council can choose a sucessor as per the terms of the 
 Constitution." Ayeka stared at the tabletop. The Constitution was an 
 agreement between the people, the Emperor and the Trees of Jurai to 
prevent 
 abuses of power.

    Needs a bit more there.  Like, something to describe how how Ayeka feels 
about the Constitution -- how loyal she is to it, or how important it is in 
preventing Jurai from falling into civil war, or something.  Something to 
bring home how much Ayeka is trapped by the situation.
  
 "He is not even old enough to rule..." She said softly looking back up. 
"He 

    Comma after "softly"

 is a newborn and she is a Melcon, she won't even let him out of her sight 
 until he is a year old. Her instincts won't allow it. How is the child 
 supposed to undergo the bonding process with the Trees if she is unwilling 
to let him go?"
 
 "Empress Funaho believes she has a way. But in order to clear the line of 
 sucession, you and Princess Sasmi must also foreswear your claims."
 
 "I doubt you will have any trouble with Sasami. She's never cared for 
being 
a princess." Ayeka stared out the window for a few more seconds and then 
 nodded. "Very well, I will foreswear my claim to the throne." The man 
nodded 
 and began to reach into his case for the proper papers when Ayeka held up 
her hand. "However. Before I sign those papers, my Father will do two 
things. 
 First, he will see to it that I am named as Regent for the Prince and that 
I 
 will be responsible for his education. Secondly, he will accept that I 
will 
 not foreswear my claim until the Prince comes of age and he will see to it 
 that the Royal Council does the same. If both these terms are not met I 
can 
 and will make Court a living hell for whoever is Regent."

    Whoooo... Ayeka shows her fangs.  And I don't doubt that's a threat with 
real teeth behind it, too.  You playin' on da Princess's turf now!
 
 "I will...hm...have to consult with his Highness."

    Hmm...too many Highnesses.  It's up to you, of course, but I'd suggest 
that the sitting Emperor should have a higher title, like "Imperial 
Highness," or even "majesty."  Plain "highness" sounds more like something 
for the second-rank Imperials -- heirs, relatives, etc.
  
 "Yes," Ayeka replied. "Do that."
 
 He got up and left and Ayeka sighed, all the confidence draining out of 
her 
 like a flood.

    Need to break up the first part of that sentence.
  
 "You did well, Ayeka," said an older man in a priest's robe as he knelt 
next 
 to her. "Exactly as we rehersed."

    SP:  Rehearsed.
  
 "Yosho, do you really think father will accede?"
 
 "It's either you or a council pawn. You, at least, they will not be able 
to 
 control and he knows it. Kinshoue will follow suit."
 
 "I hope you're right."
 
 
 Later that evening, the family gathered in the living room. One of the 
 benefits of having Washu around was that their cable didn't just get 
 terrestial stations, but extraterrestial ones as well.

    Heh.  Sug replacing "cable" with "TV," though.
    10,000,000 channels?
  
 Ryoko controlled the remote at the moment and she was casually flipping 
 channels. Sasami and Mihoshi were attending to Kinshoue, Tenchi and Ayeka 
 were reading, and Kashuhito and Nobiyuki sat at a table engaged in some 
sort 
 of card game.

    Oh, so Kinshoue is the baby!   From the way they talked about him 
earlier, I thought he was some relative with a distant claim on the throne.
  
 "I'll get it!" Sasami called when the doorbell rang and ran out, pigtails 
 streaming behind her. A few minutes later, she returned with a young woman 
 dressed in coveralls, her teal-green hair falling down over her left 
shoulder and the look of the dead in her eyes.
 
 "Bad day, Kiyone?" Ryoko asked as the green-haired woman collapsed on the 
 couch.
 
 "Yeah," Kiyone replied. "For the first time, I'm glad I let them stick me 
 with that supervisor's job." She stared at the ceiling. "Not only did I 
have 
 to practically sit on the welding crew, but there were five...five 
collisions at the Jupiter-Saturn interchange in the space of an hour. I was 
running 
back and forth so much that at one point I damn near walked back onto the 
site 
 wearing my officer's uniform."
 
 "Ouch," Ryoko agreed as she stopped on what looked like an action movie. 
 Hundreds of ships moving through space as a war march played then that 
faded 
 out to be replaced by what could only be described as a giant ameboa 
seated 
 behind a desk.

    SP:  Amoeba.  
  
 "It was perhaps the greatest effort of the Galaxy Police. A vertible 
armada 
 of ships all moving towards a single planet, guided by Samus Aran, for the 
 final crush of the last of the Zebes Space Pirates, the man known as 
Reptex. 
 Tonight, here on Mysteries That Need To Be Solved, we'll be looking at one 
 member of the GP force, and perhaps its biggest enigma. Maru Hiboshi, code 
 named Predator." In a smaller picture, a picture of a woman, light skinned 
 with black hair and a cold expression on her face appeared. "And the 
 possibility that she survived the battle known as Jackal that nearly did 
the 
 entire Galaxy Police in. We'll be right back." a commercial appeared.

    A should be capped.
  
 Ryoko chuckled. "Samus Aran...oh man, I remember her. She dragged me in a 
few times. Tough cookie that one." Ryoko looked up at the ceiling. "But 
 Predator... I never wanted to run into that one."
 
 "Afraid?" Ayeka asked archly.
 
 "Afraid? Hah!" Ryoko let out a snort of laughter. "She was just more 
trouble 
 then she was worth."

    Yep, that's the R&A we know and love.
  
 "She was a joke," Kiyone said flatly. "They both were. Jokes and cowards."

    Uh...oh.  I think somebody just opened the clost wher the GP keeps its 
skeletons.  Kiyone must really be tired.
  
 Ryoko switched the TV off and every one turned to look at Kiyone.
 
 "What do you mean?" Ayeka asked.
 
 "I...I...uh..." Kiyone stammered and then sighed. "Hiboshi was the reason 
I 
 joined the Galaxy Police. Her exploits were legendary...I thought she was 
the very image of what a police officer should be." Kiyone's expression 
hardened.
 "Then I found out what really happened at Jackal."
 
 Jackal?" Tenchi asked, his expression confused. Nobiyuki, Kasuhito, and 
 Sasami also had confused expressions on their faces.

    Missing open quote mark.  Rep of "confused."

 "Jackal." Kiyone said and stood, walking to the window. "It's listed on 
the 
 charts as the Mekoh system. Unhabited, nothing higher then bacteria and 

    SP:  Uninhabited.
    Sug:  "more advanced" for "higher."

 microbes. One planet, just far enough away to be hospitable...barely. 
That's 
 probably why Reptex set up shop there. Figured no one would think to look 
 there." She let out a disgusted chuckle. "He underestimated Aran. She 

    Rep of "there."

tracked him across several megaparsecs worth of false trails, unaware that 
Hiboshi   was doing the same thing. Word has it that there was a nice fight 
when they 
 finally crossed paths. Left an entire forest moon--Endor--I think it's 
name 

    "...moon --Endor, I think its name was-- devastated, ..."

 was, devastated and it boiled down to a draw." Kiyone turned away from the 
 window. "As the story goes, they joined forces and eventually tracked 
Reptex 
 down. They then returned to GP HQ and filed the report. Then led virtually 
 the enitire force back to Mekoh where Reptex made the star go nova, rather 
 then be captured. The blast destroyed most of the ships in the system, 
only 
 the ones at the very rear, who had time to react, managed to get away 
safely.

    Sug:  "...system -- only the..."
  
 Aran and Hiboshi, along with everyone else who died that day, were mourned 
as heros, a memorial to their sacrifice is in the plaza at HQ."

    Period after heroes.
  
 "And the unoffical story?" Ryoko asked.
 
 " One of the surviving ships recieved a tightbeam transmission from the 
com 
 specialist of the strike team. According to him, Aran and Hiboshi turned 
on 
 the strike team they led down to the planet and then pleaded with Reptex 
not 
 to set off his weapon. Supposedly it was Aran who actually triggered the 
nova in the middle of a blind panic, killing them all." Kiyone's expression 
turned thoughtful. "The whole thing should end right there, except that the 
same 

    Sug:  :"...should have ended right there..."

 ship that recieved the tightbeam also recorded a sensor ghost of Aran's 
ship 
 fleeing the nova. Then there's the sighting."
 
 "Sighting?"
 
 Kiyone nodded. "A doctor at remote mining colony claims a strange woman 
 dragged him from his bed at gunpoint and into a funny looking space-ship 
 where she made him stabilize a purple-haired woman. The thing is, he also 
 claims that in a corner, he saw Aran's suit. It's totally unique in 
 appearance and it uses Varia shield tech. Because of that, some people 
claim 
 that Aran and Hiboshi survived and are living somewhere on the edge of 
 civilization, waiting until they are needed again and other mythic crap 
like 
 that."

    Great...Arthurian myth.
    One thing, though -- this story doesn't quite hold water for me.  Why 
would Aran and Hiboshi have turned on their comrades, and *then* panicked in 
utter fear of Reptex?  I could see it if they were secretly Reptex's allies, 
but as it stands, attacking their own team because they were afraid of Reptex 
doesn't make any sense.  Hell, if they were so afraid of him, why did they 
chase him down in the first place?
  
 "But they were famous," Tenchi said. "Surely someone would've recognized 
them by now if they were still alive."
 
 "Maybe," Kiyone replied, sitting down. "The thing is, Aran was a notorious 
 recluse and pictures of her without her suit on, or even just her helmet 
off 
    
    Comma after "off"

 are rare. As for Hiboshi, I'm told she was gifted. She could slip into a 
 guise so completly, that if you didn't know who she really was, you 
couldn't 
 tell the difference. Blending in, like camoflauge. That's why they called 
her Predator. 
 So yeah, with a little effort, they could disappear into the Edge 
Colonies. 

    Sug:  could have

 But I don't believe it myself. No, I think they both died in the nova. And 
 good riddence."

    SP:  Riddance
  
 With that, the evening went back to as it had been...somewhat.
 
 ****
 A few weeks later...
 
 "I will be fine," Kasuhito repeated. "I was running the shrine by myself 

    SP:  Katsuhito

long before any of you came along."
 
 "Are you sure you don't want to come with us, Father?" Nobiyuki asked as 
he 
 and Tenchi came back down the ramp of the ship Jurai had sent to take them 
to Jurai. "It is your grandson's wedding after all."
 
 "No, no," Kasuhito chuckled. "As I've said to Tenchi, my place is here 
now. 
I won't leave." He clapped Nobiyuki on the shoulder. "Take plenty of 
pictures 
 for me."

    Huh.  Seems out of character for him.  But maybe Jurai has really bad 
memories for him...
  
 On board the ship, Ryoko and Ayeka sat side by side in the lounge area 
 watching Mihoshi with narrowed eyes as the blonde played with her son. 
There 
 was nothing they could do about putting off the marriage. They both knew 
that Tenchi saw it as his duty. Like or not, she was the mother of his 
child and 
 they knew him well enough to know that he would do the honorable thing.

    "Too bad *I* didn't think of having him get me pregnant *first.*"

 Besides, the position of second wife wasn't so bad.

    Yeah, but who's on Third?  <cue Laurel&Hardy>
  
 Mihoshi, was of course, oblivious to their hostility, though she did look 
up 

    "Mihoshi was, of course, ..."

 when Kiyone entered, followed by Tenchi and Nobiyuki. "That's that," 
Kiyone 
 said, taking a seat.
 
 "You're going too?" Ayeka asked.
 
 "Yeah," Kiyone said. "Offically, I'm the Comissioner's representative."
 
 "Whoops!" Mihoshi broke in as Kinshoue began wailing. "Somebody made a 
 poo-poo in their dipey-wipey." She exited the lounge.
 
 "And unoffically?" Ryoko asked with an arch smile.
 
 "To qoute my superior, 'Make sure that crazy psycho gives up her badge so 
 that she can never set foot on GP property ever again.' Endqoute." The 
walls 
 and floor quivered slightly as the ship began to lift off. "I've even been 
 provided with regs to support me." Kiyone smiled thinly. "As soon as the 
 ceramony is over, she will be out my hair for good." Kiyone smiled and 
then 
 gave an insane sounding cackle.

    Oh, c'mon, Kiyone!  Who's gonna save your butt now when you get in over 
your head?  It was only Mihoshi's Strange Luck that kept you alive *this* 
long!
  
 Outside, the blue of day faded to the blackness of space, and then the 
molted color of hyperspace. Behind them, hidden in the sensor shadow 
created by 

    SP:  Mottled.

 their drive's emission, another ship followed.

    Geez... it shouldn't be that easy.  Either Azusa sent an incompetent 
crew, or the followers are *really* good.
  
 ****
 Tenchi made a noise in his throat. His legs hurt, his voice was raspy from 
 all the praying, and the ceramony still wasn't over. 

    SP:  Ceremony.
  
 'Why didn't anyone tell me that Jurain wedding ceramonies last several 
 hours?' he thought to himself. 'We should at least have something to sit 
on.'

 
 He glanced at Mihoshi. The blonde was smiling broadly and showed no hint 
of 
 weariness. Tenchi bit back a sigh and tried to think about anything but 
how 
 tired he was.

    But where's the baby?  If Mihsoshi won't let him out of her sight...
  
 "And now," the Officator said. "We will join these two by the most scared 

    Scared bonds?  ITYM sacred.

 bonds. Mind to mind to mind, heart to heart, and soul to soul. If there is 
 anyone who believes that this joining to be a portent of ill, let them 
speak 
 now, or speak not at all."

    And this is where Historians record that the 17th Intergalactic War broke 
out...
  
 "Well it's not that I object to the joining, but the lady and I do have 
 unfinished bisinuess." The voice came from the back of the room. "Best we 
 settle it now."

    Oh...no.  I just had a horrid, HORRID realization.  Ky, you didn't.  TELL 
me you didn't do what I think you did...
  
 Walking up the aisle came a tall, slender man dressed in black and dark 
grey 
 robes. A jade green cape flared behind him, and his black hair was 
unbound. 
 He was smiling, but his eyes were cold and cruel.
 
 "Who...who are you?" Mihoshi asked, her voice a strained whisper.
 
 "Yes," Ayeka said as she and Ryoko joined them. "I'd like to know that 
 myself."
 
 "Ah yes, where did my manners go?" He knelt before Ayeka. "Space Pirate 
 Reptek, pleased to make your aquaintence." A moment of stunned silence 
 greeted this introduction, and Reptek was already moving, his kneeling to 

    Sug:  "...moving -- his kneeling before Ayeka..."

 Ayeka had been nothing more then the crouch for a leap and he shot over 
their heads to where Sasami had been standing, holding Kinshoue. With a 
backhand 
 swipe, he knocked her to the floor, snatching Kinshoue from her arms and 
then vanishing. A split second later, one of the skylights shattered and 
they 
 caught a glimpse of a ship streaking away. Mihoshi sank to her knees, a 
blank look on her face.

    Invisibility?  Interesting.  Must be how he got near the ceremony.
    Also:  he hit *Sasami.*  He dies.  He dies HARD.  You understand me?  I 
want his HEAD on a PIKE!
    (ahem.  Sorry.  Sasami-chan pushes my Big Brother buttons...)

 The room exploded into audible chaos as everyone began talking and yelling 
at once. And then over them all, they heard Azusa's shout of: "SILENCE!" 
Wyhen 

    SP:  When.

 the room had calmed, he began issuing rapid orders. "Get a vector on him, 
 deploy the outer system defense--he is to be taken alive, and somebody get 
me a cup of Jeune." Then he turned to his wives. "Funaho, take the flagship 
and   >get out to the System Rim. Bring back this Reptek and my Heir. Misaki, 
call 
 your subordinates and find out how the hell that man got into my palace." 

    Oh, yeah, GOOD question.  Security people for that type of get-together 
don't mess around, and Misaki's supposed to be pretty good at her job.

 Both women ran out. "Gaurds. Get my daughters and their guests to their 
 room."
 
 As the gaurds herded them to their rooms, Tenchi could hear the Emperor 
 bellowing for his drink.
 
 ****
 Everyone clustered around Kiyone as she exited the bedroom that...Tenchi 
and 
 Mihoshi would've shared later tonight. He still had trouble thinking about 
 her that way. But at the moment, the primary thing on his mind was how 
much 
 he would like to gut Reptek for stealing his son. Part of him was suprised 
at those thoughts. He was by nature a peaceful man and never cared for 
violence.
 
 But at the moment, all he wanted was to see Reptek dead.

    Oh...Reptek, you just made a BAD enemy.  Tenchi roused to a truly killing 
rage would be bad enough solo... but he comes with a whole package of 
whoop-ass in trail.  

 "...made her take a sedative and go back to sleep," Kiyone was saying. 
"All 
 we can do now is wait."
 
 Several hours passed and then there was a knock and then the door opened 
to 
 reveal a Jurain Knight. "I beg your pardon, Regent," the woman said to 
Ayeka.
 
 "But your Father's term ended a few minutes ago, and the council is 
waiting 
 for you."
 
 "Inform the council that I accept on behalf of the Emperor their oaths of 
 loyalty," Ayeka said. "The formalities will be attended to once the prince 
 has been returned to us. Until then, all of my father's advisors will keep 
 their offices and all of Jurai's resources are to focused on locating the 
 Prince. Let it be known to every male, female, and mutligender in the 
galaxy 

    "and multigender."  Heh.  Nice touch.
 
 that Jurai will not stop until Prince Kinshoue has been returned to us and 
we call upon every Juraian to assist us in however they can. I will make a 
 formal address later today. That will be all." The woman paled. Juraians 
were a very formal race and to put off a ceramony struck many as 
horrifying, but 
 she recovered, quickly, bowed and left.
 
 "Ayeka, I don't know much about the inner workings of politics, but if 
even 
 half of what you told me about the Council is true," Kiyone said, "It 
won't 
 take them long to try and use your decision to put off the ceramony 
against 
 you."
 
 "Not to long, I imagine. But they won't dare at the moment. There's quite 
a 

    SP:  too.

 bit of outrage over Kinshoue's-" She broke off as the bedroom door slammed 
 open. Mihoshi stood there, swaying on unsteady legs. Her eyes were 
bloodshot 
 and she was clearly fighting the effects of the sedative.
 
 "Kinshoue? Where's my baby? I want my baby. Give him back to me." She 
lunged for the door. "GIVE ME BACK MY BABY!" The sedatives however, made  
her even more uncoordinated then usual and she instead fell forward, laying 
there >for a moment before curling up into a ball, sobbing softly.
 
 ****
 They faced each other across the void, so close, and yet unfathomable 
 distance.
 
 "I can't go back. I won't back."

    Oh, hell.  I think I know who "they" are.  This...is gonna hurt, isn't 
it?   It's time for the long kiss goodnight...
  
 "But I need you."
 
 "No."
 
 "You're the only one who can."
 
 "It's been too long."
 
 "You made me. I didn't ask to be created. You owe me."
 
 "He is your child, not mine."
 
 "And that makes a difference?"
 
 Silence, then a sigh. "Very well."

    Yeah.  I was right.  Dammit.
  
 Her eyes snapped open and she stared at the ceiling for a moment. She 
could 
 the voice of her friends...no, Mihoshi's friends. Predators had no 
friends, 
 only allies.

    Could "what" the voice(s) of ...?
  
 Still, it would be best if she avoided contact with them...
 
 She reached for Mihoshi's cube.
 
 ****
 Kiyone rubbed her forehead as she walked down the cooridoor. As the 
ranking 
 GP officer on Jurai, it had fallen to her to coordinate the GP 
investigation 
 until a lieutenent could arrive to take over. Not that they would do 
 anything. Reptek had taken Kinshoue only fifteen hours ago and they still 
had no idea how he had gotten inside the palace. Under standard procedure 
they 
 were to stay put and wait for the kidnapper to make their demands. But 
 Kiyone's instincts told her otherwise. Reptek had said that he and Mihoshi 
 had "Unfinished Bisinuess", he wanted her to come after him. And she would 

    SP:  Business.

 too. Melcon maternal instincts were the strongest in the known galaxy and 
 since they were approaching the point where they couldn't give her anymore 
 Sedatives without risking her health, they would either have to restrain 
her 

    Sedatives shouldn't be capped.
 
 or turn her loose.
 
 Kiyone stopped in the middle of the cooridoor. And why shouldn't they turn 
 her loose? Kiyone had helped raise her younger siblings...before....she 
 forced those memories away. The important thing was she could understand 
what Mihoshi was going through.
 
 And as that thought went through her head, a plan followed it. She, and 
 Mihoshi--no, Tenchi would insist on coming along and so would Ryoko, whom 
 they would need to fly Ryo-Oki--fine. The four of them could leave now on 
 Ryo-Oki and then board the Yagami when it caught up to them. That wouldn't 
 take more then a few days. Then it was simply a matter of turning Mihoshi 
 loose. There was no mountain big enough for Reptek to hide under once that 
 happened.

    You don't know how right you are, K.
  
 She passed the index and middle finger of her right hand over the bracelet 
on her left wrist. The disc parted, revealing a small sensor plate, which 
she 
 double tapped. She made the passing motion again, and the disc closed back 
 up. She looked back up just in time to see the flash of a cube teleport 
and 
 then take a spinning heel kick to the side of the head.
 
 Her training took over and she moved with the blow, falling to her knees, 
 dazed, but not down. Shaking her head to clear it, she saw someone dart 
 around the corner. Her head still ringing, she took off in pursuit.
 
 ****
 For several minutes, her assailant led her through the halls of the palace 
 and finally onto the landing pad where the running figure darted into a 
yacht and closed the door.
 
 Kiyone stopped and almost fell over, the pain in her head was getting 
worse 
 and it was hard to think. With clumsy fingers, she pulled her own cube and 
 tried to remeber the configuration for teleportation. She must have gotten 
it right, because a moment later, she was in a lounge and then blackness 
claimed her and she knew nothing more.
 
 When she awoke, she heard a the distant hum of a stardrive, felt carpet 
under her cheek and when her eyes opened, she could see the ceiling. Her 
head >was still sore, but she could think clearly and--
 
 Suddenly, she was back in the cooridoor, looking at a moment frozen in 
time. 

    SP:  Corridor.
 
 She could see her assailant, the one she had chased into the yacht. Saw 
their face.
 
 She saw, but she couldn't believe.
 
 "Mihoshi?"
 
 The click and hum of a GP issue plasma pistol being primed sounded behind 
 her.
 
 "No, not Mihoshi..."
  


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