And now for the most recent one....
Kasumi turned from the stove to watch her mother as she sat on the porch,
fiddling with some mechanical device on her lap. For a change, Kachiko was
wearing a shirt that reached down to her waistline. However, it was still
highly risqu�, since it was sleeveless and had a neckline that hung both
loose and low. To make matters worse, the material was white, and Kachiko
was obviously not wearing a bra underneath. If she was hit with an errant
spray of water, an event that happened all too often at the Tendou
household, the shirt would become semi-transparent, and then the whole world
would be able to see...
Akane: The same thing that Ranma openly displays about once
every other chapter?
"I don't know." Soun looked indecisively at Kachiko from the cover of the
door frame leading into the kitchen. Both he and Genma's heads barely stuck
out beyond the edge of the frame, lest they be discovered and Kachiko grew
angry at them for staring at her. As it was, she seemed content to look at
the yard, her head swaying back and forth slightly.
"Kachiko grow angry at them"
Yearning for his long lost wide, Soun founding a bit more backbone as he
quietly made his way through the kitchen until he was on the periphery of
the porch, a mere handful of feet behind Kachiko's sitting form. She had not
reacted to his presence. Her back remained to him as she continued facing
the yard, her head still slightly swaying back and forth for no apparent
reason.
"long lost wife"
It's a good typo, though. ;)
Kachiko stiffened, she looked over her shoulder, identified the person
latched onto her, and began madly twitching. She easily broke out of Soun's
grasp, spun around, and roared, "Don't you ever give up, you disgusting
pervert?!" One earthshattering punch sent the wailing man high into the sky
and out of sight.
"earth-shattering" or "earth shattering".
Kachiko shook her head, then began looking past Nodoka. "Apparently she
didn't tell me everything. I was only expecting Ranma's mother. They didn't
tell me his grandmother was coming along too. Is your daughter around?"
Heh.
A derisive snort escaped Genma's lips. He was instantly made sorry by the
evil stare that was unleashed upon him. Almost as though he was reading
lines, badly, he stated, "That's right. My wife is only thirty-five."
Inspired. ;)
Kachiko unleashed a adoring gaze upon him. "Your presence here can only mean
one thing."
"It can?"
"Yes. It means you're stalking me." Kachiko swooned.
Ah... blunt honest romanticism. Refreshing! ;)
Hiroyoshi rubbed his eyes, sniffled, then leveled an accusatory finger at
Kachiko. "That woman touched my bottom in a way that made me uncomfortable."
It's nice to see kids abreast of today's modern issues. ;)
Ranma relaxed, obviously delighted about not receiving a more accusatory
interrogation. "Nothing, really. We had a little problem with The CLAP is
all."
Nodoka felt her heart stop in her chest momentarily. "You and that girl...
had a problem with... the clap?"
Heh. Yes, this is exactly the sort of conclusion that
Nodoka would leap to. ;)
A much more introspective chapter. Kachiko's internal
monologue is a bit too long, but it covers a lot of material
that probably needs to be covered, so I really don't have
any good suggestions as to what to do about it. On the
other hand, I really liked the ending Kasumi-and-Kachiko
scene. It was touching, made a number of points in a
natural, subtle way, and didn't delve into soppy
sentimentalism. Good stuff.
Anyways, looking forward to the next chapter... though, to
be honest, I hope you end the cliffhanger in Avenging
first. ;)
Bjorn